My response to dVerse Poets Pub Meter-Made Mood–dVerse Meeting the Bar
Victoria has challenged us to write a poem that illustrates how meter contributes to the mood of a poem.
His face is traced and creased by Norfolk gales,
His skin tanned Van Dyke brown as wherry sails,
The wherryman sits on the tiller aft,
With steady hand he guides his graceful craft.
A waterfowl with broad vermillion hatch,
The wherry glides through reed and willow thatch,
Its sail cuts dark into the sparkling light
And startles long-necked cormorants into flight;
The wherryman observes the soaring birds
Scatter feathers in the sky like words.
As sundown is announced in gold and red
And other folk prepare themselves for bed,
The wherryman moors close to windswept beach
To watch the sun slip slowly out of reach.
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Image found on www.sailing-by.org.uk
Admiring the character sketch of the wherryman Kim, specially :
His face is traced and creased by Norfolk gales,
His skin tanned Van Dyke brown as wherry sails
Would love to watch sundown in gold and red!
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I think I posted some photos of Norfolk sunsets with a couple of poems last August. My husband took me for meal at a local restaurant on my birthday and as we came out of the car park, all I could see was the wonderful sky! Sadly, there aren’t many wherrymen around, although I might find that I’m wrong after tonight’s talk!
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Wow, an incredible poem under all circumstances, so very strong with a place & time unknown to most of us. Grace nailed the lines I admired; showing her astute judgement. Your poem was so well written, so rife with ambience, the aa, bb, cc, etc rhyme scheme worked flawlessly; no sense of pushing, or fudging to make the rhyme. Over all an outstanding effort, with lots of iambs to spice it up.
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Thank you so much, Glenn. You have made a very difficult day shine!
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This is utterly gorgeous, Kim. Your create a sense of character in the wherryman, a feeling of serenity, even fulfillment in the setting and share with me a bit of culture unknown to me here in the wild west. I do believe that if I had a bucket list, travel to your piece of the world would be at the very top. It doesn’t hurt that I devour British mysteries. What a great setting that would be.
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Thank you, Victoria.
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Soooooo deeply enamored of this:
“Scatter feathers in the sky like words.”
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🙂
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Sounds like the beginning of a fascinating tale, Kim! The character and the purposed served seems rife for a backstory! Well crafted.
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Thanks, Walt.
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You really showed me that place, the emotions and the sky.. the meter close to heartbeat, really soothing and adds to it all with the subtle rhymes, it all felt so easy and flowing.
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Thank you, Bjorn.
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Gorgeous.
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Thank you Freya.
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Such a stunning character sketch here, Kim 🙂
Beautifully penned.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Thank you Sanaa. It’s going to be included in a book by the Norfolk Wherry Trust some tie in the not too distant future. Lots of love, Kim x
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A vivid picture of the wherryman–very nicely done!
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Thank you 😊
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I LOVE this. I can follow the rhythmic meter and the sense of the poem flows. So much beautiful imagery here — the cormorants, the sun slipping slowly out of reach. This is quite wonderful!
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Thank you for your kind comments, Lillian!
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Beautiful! Love everything about it…the colors, meter, flow, character and sense of location.
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Thank you kindly, Kathy!
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I enjoyed sailing with you and the wherryman! This is lovely!
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Thank you, Bekkie. Delighted you came along for the ride.
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What a super poem! We def don’t have wherrymen here but I so wish we did based on this poem. Good use of lines and meter.
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Thank you, Toni!
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