In a world so conveniently organised
there is no need for charm or chat-up lines,
all the young have to do is swipe
and rate their lives on the number of likes.
For those of us who never went on dates,
who fell in love with long-term friends,
preferring the safety of familiar faces,
dating websites are alien planets.
As we settle into the autumn of our lives,
cosy in the knowledge of ourselves and of each other,
crows feet and wrinkles do not matter.
In our hearts and minds we are the same young things,
those carefree lovers who shared songs and dreams,
who still hold hands and adore each other selflessly.
Kim M. Russell, 2017
Old Couple Couple Walking from an original painting by J Coates found on Pinterest
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar – Pablo Neruda-style Sonnet
Bjőrn is back as barkeeper this evening with a sonnet prompt. He says that everyone knows that a sonnet rhymes, that there are rhyme schemes. and that a sonnet is written in iambic pentameter. It fourteen lines and something called a volta. And then there is Pablo Neruda and his Love sonnet XVII, which has no rhyme scheme and no meter (or a free meter). But it does have fourteen lines, and a volta.
Today Björn wants us to write a free verse sonnet in the same style, stating our problem in the first two quatrains (packing it with metaphors, with mystery and imagery) and then applying it for real in the concluding part.
I can feel the change from the young to older age in your lovely sonnet… there is a comfort in growing old together… absolutely adore the ending.
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Thanks Bjorn!
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I love this, Kim! Yes, to growing older together with someone you love. Beautiful!
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Thank you, Merril! I just spotted an erroneous semi colon in the penultimate stanza. I was sure I’d edited it before I posted!
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The Gremlins like to keep people jumping. 🙂
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Never got into the new way of dating site, ha ~ Prefer the old fashioned way, of meeting people and interacting with them. Love the happy ending of your sonnet Kim ~
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this is wonderful “In our hearts and minds we are the same young things,” i still keep forgetting I have bits of grey hair…
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Thanks Alison! I’m looking forward to a full head of silver and white now – I quite like the Helen Mirren and Judi Dench look!
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Excellent free verse sonnet–sweet smiles in every line; love your jibe at youth too. Put me in mind of those famous lines–“Come, Love, take my hand and grow old with me, for the best is yet to come.” with Hepburn & Olivier.
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Thanks Glenn! Hope you’re well 😉
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You have spoken for me – and I love your choice of illustration
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Thank you, Maureen.
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What a truism! Beautifully written.
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Thanks Bev!
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This is beautiful – and disturbingly true in a way (first 4 lines + dating websites). I love it, very well written!
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Thank you, Crystal!
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Beautifully written and so true.
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Nice last stanza.
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Thanks Frank!
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I love this sweet, romantic and real world love far better than fantasy.
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Thank you, Sumana!
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The life romantic pre-virtual relationships…built on sounder foundations methinks. Enjoy wrinkling 😉
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“As we settle into the autumn of our lives,
cosy in the knowledge of ourselves and of each other,
crows feet and wrinkles do not matter.” True love, this is a beautiful tribute to those who endure. (This month will be our 40th anniversary)
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Congratulations, Debi, I hope you celebrate your 40 years in style!
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There is little in this world that is more precious than an old couple deeply in love. ..who have been deeply in love since they were a young couple!
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Each line is full of longtime love sentiments..well done, Kim
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Thank you, Kathy!
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Indeed, I can’t imagine there is magic in any relationship devised by algorithm. You paint an enviable picture here.
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LOL. I didn’t do any of the things Bjorn suggested in his prompt. but I love this. Grow old with me, the best is yet to come….I remember that quote from somewhere. Love is wonderful, isn’t it?
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Brava.. 🥀🥀🥀🥀🥀
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One of the most beautiful forms of love!
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