queues no, crowds no
need no patience for
to wait no time
buy we on-line
dissatisfaction we unload
media on social
to never people met we have
politicians and celebrities
of headlines in a blizzard
sensational of stories
if clicks no more there were
the nettle grasp we might
face of face to conversation
human synchronisation
Kim M. Russell, 2017
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Scribbling for Poetics: Grandma?
Paul has given us a couple of examples for this Tuesday’s prompt: ‘anyone lived in a pretty how town’ by ee cummings and ‘A Carafe, that is a Blind Glass’ by Gertrude Stein. He hopes that the challenge is quite clear and would like us to pen please a word of poetical prose, rhyme it may do so or not so maybe, and at all attention to grammar we should pay no.
Love how you have used the Yoda lines in this, and maybe this is what our language will come to in the world of social media.
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It wasn’t easy! 🙂
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Another title could be “Snap”. You soared & rocked the prompt, obviously comfortable in Cummingspeak–as am I. I like your line /to never people met we have/.
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Thanks Glenn!
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There is a staccato rhythm to this which totally rocks the poem and the prompt…on top of that such clever use of language to link between the lines. If it was difficult you hid it well 😉
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Thanks Paul!
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I think I found a meaning in this one! As a prompt, it wasn’t easy.
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Omg Kim, this is your best yet, in my opinion! Bloody cranberry juice brilliant!!
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Thank you, Diana!
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WOW! Methinks bobblespeak is your forte’
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beautifully written 😊😊
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certainly turning up some gems
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Thanks Maureen!
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Oh, god! A dystopian poem! Actually meeting and conversing? Face to face? AHHHHHHHH!
Great stuff, and greatly written.
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Thanks Charley!
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Preach it, sister! I simply LOVE this!
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Thank you, Jill!
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Words that wake up my senses !!!
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This was so familiar….and then i realised that its close to the way my kids chat on social media. Good one!
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Excellent poetic experimentation of the prompt breaking away grammar. Excellent writing. 🙂
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Fabulous! 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Thanks Dorna!
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Yay! You nailed it here! Great response to the challenge. And oh yes….that social media and clicking on links…the news assails us and the “friends” keep sending us the doodads of their day as if we want to know about their red ballons and carpet sweeping. Yep — face to face for me is much preferred. 🙂
LOVE your title here too…read a line, click, read a line, click. 🙂
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The thought in your poem and the prompt goes well with each other…..so brilliantly wrote…
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