Streams trickle
and ditches chuckle
with last night’s rain;
it giggles in puddles
in the muddy lane
and glistens
on the window pane.
In the gloom
of my morning room,
where merging
shadows whisper,
I just murmur,
pull up the duvet
and turn over.
Kim M. Russell, 2018
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Quadrille: Murmur
De is hosting this Mionday’s Quadrille and she’s asking us to murmur.
Ohhhhh. Sounds like a perfect morning to me!
LOVE this:
“it giggles in puddles”
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Thank you, De!
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I just wish… you are so making me envious… I have to go to work… and it’s Monday.
Love the whispering of shadows…
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Thanks Bjorn!
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Charming word play and the end is so perfect!
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Thanks Jill!
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Love the voice you give to rain here ….. it’s a great technique for nature poetry
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Thank you, Paul!
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LOVE the way you write. Sounds lovely.
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Thank you so much, Hannah.
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I love to pull up the duvet and ward off the whispering shadows! Love this poem too!
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Thank you, Bev!
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Morning murmur indeed 🙂 Yes….it could be the murmuring sounds the rain makes…but also the murmuring sound one makes when glancing out from the pillow, we see and hear the scene you’ve so wonderfully described, and we murmur, eyes have closed, and pull those covers up to cocoon a bit at home 🙂
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🙂
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I love that first stanza and “and glistens
on the window pane.”
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Thank you, Debi.
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I wonder how many of us have the same feelings? Rain on the window, early morning, definitely time to roll over and go back to sleep.
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Luckily , we have a dry morning today with only a few pink clouds.
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…and here we have grey skies with the threat of rain.
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Fantastic piece.
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Thank you!
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rain giggling in puddles – I’ll never hear rain the same old way.
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🙂
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Lovely form and imagery…and that duvet being pulled up at the end is wonderful. Truly enjoyed this.
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Thank you so much, Jo-Anne.
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I love to hear and watch the rain, of course from inside the house, all snuggled up! Nice way to describe it in your poem. 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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Gosh this is absolutely beautiful!💖 I love “where merging shadows whisper”… sigh…💖
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Thank you, Sanaa!
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Simply Sweet! 😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀
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Thanks Dorna!
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Lovely rhythms and rhymes!
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Thank you, Frank!
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😇
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Haha – I actually giggled at this:
it giggles in puddles
in the muddy lane
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🙂
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Nice sound. I liked the giggling in puddles of the rain.
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Thank you, Frank!
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Those rainy, cold days just seem like a good time to turn over and grab another 40 winks. It flows in such a rainy vibe, I’m tempted to go back to bed now and do that myself
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🙂
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Such a change in tone at the end; get out of the gloom and go jump in a puddle!
Nice flow and sound to your poem.
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Thank you! Jumping in puddles is the best suggestion!
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Oh, I know this feeling of murmuring very well!!
dwight
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Actually, morning is my best time for writing, It’s my husband who loves the duvet!
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The teasing of the elements! Like toddlers playfully pulling you from one reverie into another:)
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A feast for the mind’s ear! And I can really relate to that last line. 🙂
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😊
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sensational contrasts between out and inside
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Thank you, Laura.
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Strong stuff.
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Kim, apologies, I got my comments mixed up between yours and Crow. Had a few tabs open at the same time! Meant to say: no drawing the blankets close and turning over for me – I have a cat! Loved your poem.
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That’s exactly what we did yesterday!!
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😊
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The perfect response. (K)
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😊
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Lovely, Kim. This made me smile.
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Thank you, Merril!
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