Quintessence
of fluting
blackbird’s gone;
at sunrise,
golden-beaked
jet-black throats
no longer sing,
though summer’s
in full swing.
Kim M. Russell, 15th July 2018
My response to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Fussy Little Forms: Tricube – also linked to Poets United Poetry Pantry
Marian is back in the Garden this weekend with Fussy Little Forms. We’re writing tricubes, in which:
- each line contains three syllables;
- each stanza contains three lines; and
- each poem contains three stanzas.
You set the scene, and it is somewhat sad, the words, “gone, and no longer sing”…seem sad to me. Yet inspite of it all, “summer is in full swing.”
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Sadly, this is what happens. Once blackbirds have nested and the fledglings have left, and they no longer have a territory to defend, they stop singing! I miss the blackbird in the morning. 😉
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I miss the blackbirds singing too!💖 Such a beautiful scene you have created, Kim! 😊
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Thank you, Sanaa!
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I think this is my favourite of the tricubes. You have made it look easy but the pace and description is so skillfully accomplished, and conveys your theme very aptly.
Silent birds means that mating season is over, chicks hatched and ready to fly.. a sure sign that summer is reaching a conclusion.
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Thank you, Kerry – you’ve understood it completely. We stayed overnight at a guest house along the coast. I wasn’t able to sleep and was looking forward to some birdsong but all I heard was an argument between some locals and very loud seagulls (leaving a message on my car)! I miss the blackbirds.
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Really sad. I had not realized that blackbirds don’t sing if they don’t have a territory to defend. I do love the singing of birds….of whatever kind.
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Me too!
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Yes… I too really love this poem. Well done. I adore it. Also presented so beautifully in black & white with that awesome shot of the 4 boys. Wonderful!!
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Thank you, Marian!
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I love your poem about blackbirds. So poignant.
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Thank you!
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oh! the climate change and pollution are so bad for the flora and fauna
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It’s getting worse.
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I loved this even more when i read the explanation in the comments. Love the vivid descriptions.
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Thank you so much, Sherry.
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So lovely…you said so much in a beautifully simple way.
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Thank you, Sherri.
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Bittersweet, in its beauty and truth. Love the imagery…
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Thank you, Magaly!
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The second stanza says so very much. The blackbird without a territory is silent. Almost homeless. I love blackbirds and crows. I wish they could sing always.
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I’m on a bit of a bird trip (flight?) at the moment. 😊🐦
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Keep flying Kim! 🐦
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🙂
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Poorer summer, minus the blackbird. Beautiful poem.
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Thank you, Susan.
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lovely way to use the form Kim – you’ve really captured the essence of the black bird and have used this form to compliment what you’ve wanted to say, with great ease!
(odd isn’t it – but here, the black birds still do sing, even if it’s long past mating season; it’s just that they are more elusive about it … ah well, bird song still fills the air ~ there is joy in this)
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Thank you, Pat. It’s 06.18 and it’s silent – no blackbirds. Yesterday morning I woke up to seagulls!
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well, birds will ruckus out! most mornings, I wake to the mad ravens/crows and then a trilling cardinal (well hidden), followed by the sparrows, finches, chickadees and other assorted feathered follies, along with cackling robins – such a symphony … so I suppose, best to be grateful that there is still bird song … beats honking horns. LOL
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Trying to remember, if the Redwing Blackbird sings into July and later, in the local wetlands here. They have a melodic song, as I used to walk by their nests. Sadly, those areas have been turned into housing subdivisions.
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It’s such a shame that different species of birds are declining. Luckily our garden is wild and the birds have plenty to eat, so we get to see quite a range.
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Bittersweet and beautiful! Love it.
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Thank you, Ayala.
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Excellent piece and music…
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Thank you!
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There’s a melancholy mood to this. Oh and I love that Beatles song
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Thank you, Susie. I love that song too!
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Well you made this form look so easy–well done!
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Thanks!
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You nailed it Kim! Love this.
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Thanks Viv!
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🙂
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Well wrought to the challenge and nailed the bittsweetness of a great song lost.
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Thanks Brendan.
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Bittersweet and yet hopeful at the same time – well done!
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Thank you, Jo!
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Such an interesting form Kim… I’d love to try it!
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😊
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‘golden-beaked
jet-black throats’
Such a vivid image. Love all three, Kim.
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Thankyou, Sara.
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I totally loved this – and the song by those other singers who are gone too (at least as the group they were). I am reminded, too, of my Dad singing ‘Bye-bye blackbird’ as he often did, one of my earliest and most beloved memories.
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My granddad used to sing ‘By bye blackbird’ to me!
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