Anguished cries of lapwings rise
from deep in sedgy fields to sky;
their tinny raspings bring to mind
an anguish of a different kind:
the mewling of a starving child;
a young girl’s screams as she’s defiled;
a mother’s keening of despair;
a grandmother’s calm and care
as she sings a soothing lullaby
of winter lapwings wavering by.
Kim M. Russell, 19th July 2018
My response to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Get Listed: July Edition also linked to Poets United Poetry Pantry
Sanaa is our host for this month’s Get Listed prompt and she has taken ‘The Last Rose of Summer’ by Thomas Moore as inspiration.
She wants us to come up with our own brief creations, remembering to keep your poems under 100 words., by choosing one of the word groups (using all four words) in a form of our choice or in free verse.
My goodness you have truly captured the feeling of anguish here, Kim. I like the contrast of “soothing lullaby” and “winter lapwings” .. Powerful writing 💕
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Thanks so much Sanaa. 😊💟
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The words do lead to romantic excess yet you beautifully drew the many types of anguish here in. A lovely piece of work Kim.
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Thank you so much, Toni.
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I never heard of lapwings until now. Runs off to find out about them….
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We get a lot of them in East Anglia.
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Anguish indeed, Kim. Terrible instances of abuse and hardship. Grandmother and your excellent write salvaged subject matter.
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Thank you, Jim.
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A very strong and powerful poem, the various descritptions mentioned are happening all over the world and these things really fill one with anger and anguish.
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Thank you, Vandana.
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Whena child is violated parents somehow feel they have failed and the anguish is enormous and it takes a grandparent to be the one that copes with her soothing lullaby to help ease the pain and shame. Beautifully written Kim.
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Thank you, Robin.
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I know it is a stretch but as a grandmother I know I would feel the anguish tripled – mine, my daughter’s and my granddaughter’s or as we often do the anguish of all the anguish everywhere. I hear the sound of the lapwing in her lullaby as a wavering, “tinny raspings” of old age and hurt.
This is stellar work.
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Thank you so much, Debi.
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Such a wonderful poem, today it is my favorite of your’s. xoxoxoxo
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Thank you so much, Annell! 😊💟 xxx
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What a beautiful sight – the lapwing against the sky. Your poem transported me, Kim, and made me consider the anguish of countless people whose daily struggles I will never know.
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Thank you, Kerry.
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YeOWWWCH.
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It is amazing what a sound hold, what it brings to mind, what it brings to a pen. This is gorgeous.
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Thank you so much, Susie.
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I’ve never heard (or seen) a lapwing, but now I can well imagine what their cries must be like. And your rhyme and rhythm make a lovely poem.
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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Beautiful Kim and I agree with Rosemary re the rhyme and rhythm.
Dare I say the rhythm is broken on the eighth line and would be easily fixable.
Sorry, please feel free to hit me!
The kindest of regards
Anna :o]
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Than you, Anna. I wouldn’t dream of hitting you! I would be upset if you didn’t feel you could point out something in my poems – that’s one of the reasons I post them. 😊 I’ll take a look at line eight this evening. My husband has gone to London to support an old friend of ours who’s in a boxing match this evening. I am doing something he, the headbanger that he is, would not approve of – watching Mamma Mia on TV! I’ve never seen it, so I may not last the whole film.
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Yes. The lapwings cry resonate well the anguish of so many fellow human beings
Good Sunday Kim
Much💐love
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Bless you, Gillena. Have lovely rest of this Sunday. Love Kim xxx
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Your poem is very poignant. There IS so much anguish in our world. Thank goodness for those loving grandmother-arms (around children lucky enough to have them).
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Thank you, Mary.
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Sounds like this do call to mind several scenarios. I suspect the nan here is …. you!
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It could be me but I was thinking of my own nan, who was always there when we needed her.
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Aww- bless her.
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Oh, this anguish brings to light all the torments of this world of the living and how we find our comfort in small considerations like a caring hand or a lullaby. To find that comfort, in the end, is significant.
-HA
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Thanks HA.
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I keep on moving back and forth between the poem and the comment box. I’m not even sure how many times I’ve read this piece. The sounds conjured by every line (I googled lapwing’s cry and I thought my heart would break). I swear I can hear the birds and the girl and the mother and the grandmother (thank goodness for grandmothers).
I love the rhythm of the piece. The fact that it can be chanted as a lullaby makes it even more powerful.
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Thank you for close reading and honest comments, Magaly. 🌞
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I love the lapwings at beginning and ending…….and in between, the anguish of humans , bracketed by beauty. I love the calm grandmother. We are the ones who stay steady in the tempest. Someone has to.
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I had to google the cry of a lapwing too. It is a perfect natural observation to use as a jumping off point to create your piece.
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Thank you, Rommy!
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Such a range of stories they tell. This really touched me.
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Thank you, Colleen.
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kaykuala
their tinny raspings bring to mind
an anguish of a different kind:
Unwittingly they remind us that crying for help can always be heard but not addressed fast enough. It is a pity that the weak is the victim in many instances!. Thoughtful take, Kim!
Hank
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Thank you, Hank!
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Goodness..that scream of the girl defiled… and the image of the birds… strong poem Kim!
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Thank you, Rajani!
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The lapwing voices speak for many pouring out their anguish. This is a beautiful, powerful poem, Kim.
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Thank you, Sara.
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I don’t know the lapwing’s cry, but I’m on my way to find it. Strong poem, Kim.
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Thank you, Sarah. I’m thinking of making it part of a quartet I’m putting together for a poetry competition – a bird for every season type of thing. We get such a variety of birds in North Norfolk.
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