the moon greets the dawn shimmering
from night’s silent well
breaking the stark silence of a winter morning,
a single crow calls
in sleep’s dark cocoon there are sounds
no one else can hear
beyond the heart beat, air in lungs
and surge of blood in ears
from the depths of sleep, muffled ticks
are anchored to the clock
soundless between the echoing rhythm,
a disquiet blue and dark
silence of fresh frost glistening on the path
is broken underfoot
language is frozen like ice on a pond
and memories are mute
a smile is soundless yet its message resounds
in a thunderbolt
Kim M. Russell, 31st July 2018
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: The Sounds of Silence, also linked to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Tuesday Platform
This Tuesday we have a guest host tending the bar, Dwight Roth, who asks us to consider the sounds of silence. He says that we are looking at how silence speaks volumes, although no words are actually spoken, and thinking how one can live in a city of a million people yet feel silent and alone. He illustrates this idea with the music and lyrics of Simon and Garfunkel, as well as poems by Anna Kamienska and Langston Hughes.
Our challenge is to write a poem about the human condition that eludes to silence, especially the sounds of silence. I revisited some of the haiku I have written about silence and rewrote them as a new poem.
So bang on here, dear–a simple smile is the true sound of silence. I enjoyed this journey from slumber to new day that you’ve provided. I spend a few moments recalling the dream I have awakened from before I slip on the tack for the day.
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Than kyou, Glenn!
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When we are living in a world like that it only takes a smile….
The images of the ticking clock, the early morning, and suddenly, Bang, that smile. Exactly how life should be to manage in another day.
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But it can be annoying to morning grumps!
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Your silence is so rich. I love the depth of silence you get in the winter – you describe it so well here.
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Thank you, Sarah. I love the muffled, foggy silence of autumn and winter too. It seems noisier in the summer, especially with holidaymakers about.
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“muffled ticks
are anchored to the clock”
Luv this image Happy Tuesday Kim
much love…
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Thanks Gillena. Happy Tuesday!
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That image struck me too.
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You mos def carried the them of silence in this beautifully I think of silence in the foggy summer mornings. fortunately we do not have holiday people around in this area!
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Cheers Toni! One of the reasons I love autumn and winter is that it is perfectly silent without visitors and extra traffic in our tiny village.
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Nice last two lines. All it takes is a smile.
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Thanks Frank 🙂
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So gorgeous. I love the first three stanzas.
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Thank you!
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I love the set particularly this one:
soundless between the echoing rhythm,
a disquiet blue and dark
and the last about the magic of the smile.
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Thank you, Grace.
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A nice compilation Kiim. The sounds that break silence are also very interesting. The tick tock anchored to the clock was a nice image. The thunderbolt smile always seems to speak volumes.
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Thank you, Dwight, and thanks for the great prompt!
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Your are welcome.
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This is a great (aural) observation: soundless between the echoing rhythm. Especially hard to notice those silences in the morning when every sound bangs against our sleep.
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
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language is frozen like ice on a pond
and memories are mute
I really loved this image – along with the others, carefully considered and culled, as each paints a very clear, and stark impression – it feel like we’re slipping into the moments, and then, we’re that pause – as readers, witnessing, and yet, who hasn’t had these same if not similar moments? So it is with interest and elegance that you’ve written of this solitude and silence, and very well shaped our reading of this poem – for honestly, this is one of those poems you end up slipping into, not only the words, but also the spaces between them. Well done Kim!
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Thank you for your close reading and kind words, Pat, which are much appreciated. The photograph was taken by my husband on his way to work.
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that is an absolutely stunning image – I mean just gorgeous ….
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Thank you, Pat. You’re very kind.
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You have painted winter so beautifully, i can almost hear that crow calling.
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Funnily enough, there were two serenading me very early this morning. Autumns on the way.
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kaykuala
a smile is soundless yet its message
resounds in a thunderbolt
How true Kim! A smile will easily ease off tensions without all the unnecessary arguments to and fro which may get out of hand!
Hank
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Thank you, Hank!
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language is frozen like ice on a pond
and memories are mute
Love this best!
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Thank you, Mary!
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language is frozen like ice on a pond… that’s a terrific visual.. how cold would that silence be!
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Thanks Rajani!
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So many strong images. The sounds, of silence broken, make the reader more aware of the silence; the space between. I liked the silence of frost broken under foot
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Frost underfoot is one of my favourites, together with crows in mist.
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a thorough consideration of silence, Kim, and wonderfully penned.
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Thank you V.J.!
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I like how a smile breaks the silence…yes!
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Thank you, Lynn!
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I am so glad that the speaker’s smile breaks language out of its ice-cage. The idea of language frozen and of memories muted makes me shiver with a creeping sort of fright.
May the smiles always sing… and roar, too. 😀
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🙂
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This is lovely Kim. The last line about a smile that speaks volumes is perfect and so true!
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Thank you, Viv!
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To me it is a beautiful winter morning in the lap of nature. just love it!
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Thank you so much, Vandana!
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“language is frozen like ice on a pond/and memories are mute”: Ooh, how exquisite! The silences do speak in their frosty tongue in your words, and that last bit about smile makes it a composite whole. The interplay of sounds and language is very interesting too.
-HA
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Thank you, HA!
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Love this , Kim. I woke up this morning before five. I’m sitting here, me with the fish, drinking decaf, eating a couple of saltines with peanut butter, and reading. An electric motor just stopped, I think it was the refrigerator.
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Thank you, Jim. I hope you enjoyed your fishing.
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Oh I love this especially; “soundless between the echoing rhythm, a disquiet blue and dark.” 💜
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Thank you, Sanaa 🙂 xxx
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I think I can relate with every line….how easily with such flow …you have painted those silence present in everybody’s life with depth!!!
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Thank you kindly, Sreeja!
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I especially love the silence of Winter and you capture it so well with ‘the moon greets the dawn shimmering from night’s silent well – breaking the stark silence of a winter morning, a single crow calls’ – a beautiful write Kim :o) xxx
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Thank you, Xenia! 🙂 xxx
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The sounds of awakening. (K)
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🙂
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Ooh, that language ‘frozen like ice on a pond,’ where even memories are muted–a forbidding but thoroughly fascinating landscape!
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🙂
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So ethereal
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Thank you.
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