stubble still crackles
burnt fields quiver
their dry voices whisper
in devastation’s backwind
blackened trees shiver
letting fly blackened
bark and leaves – a whirlwind
of charcoal and dust
Kim M. Russell, 26th November 2018
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Fire up that Creativity, also linked to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Tuesday Platform
Victoria is our host this Tuesday and she tells us that less than 3 hours from where she is the people of Paradise, California are suffering the results of the most devastating fire in California history, which is why fire has been on her mind.
She says that it’s clear that fire is destructive, but it also has purifying benefits, clearing the earth for new growth. It may symbolize the end of an unhealthy relationship. The fire in a hearth brings warmth and comfort, the burning wick of a candle, light.
For today’s Poetics, Victoria would like us to write poems in whatever form we choose about fire.
Excellent structure, Kim! Your end words are perfectly chosen and the sounds that come from quiver and whisper capture the post-fire sounds.
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Thank you, Jill.
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You describe this so painfully precisely, Kim. Having lived though this, I could almost smell the after-effects when there is still so much danger. One of the things that haunts me about wildfire is the horrendous effect on wildlife. Think I need to add that to my poem.
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Thank you, Victoria. I tried not to think of the wildlife as it’s so upsetting. Writing about a blackened tree is upsetting enough.
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There is a soft rhythm to your poem Kim, at odds with the subject. It’s as unsettling as a wild fire.
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Thank you, Jane. You always pick up on the not so obvious aspects of poems.
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It’s whatever stands out to me. Could also be that I possibly don’t always get the obvious 🙂 Obtuse.
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Oh I could hear the fire in your word… the way if crackles and breaks… and leaves a broken world behind…
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Thank you, Bjorn!
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You’ve painted a stark picture of how fire can devastate and leave a barren field in its wake. Stunning visuals, Kim!
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Thank you, Jade.
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The way I read this could not possibly have anything to do with what you intended, so I’ll just say, “I like it.” 🙂
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Even back in the 60’s – when I was in the Navy, I remember a wildfire burning on the desert, right up to the gates of NAS Miramar. Hundreds of us stood on that fireline and denied the flames access.
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A job well done, Glenn.
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I liked this Kim, an excellent expression of the relentless power of fire… and the photo made me sad…
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Thank you, Rob. It took me ages to find an image and it made me sad too.
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I think you’ve captured the essence, the eeriness of the aftermath …. there is almost a hush, a reverence for what has swept through … and yet, the stubble, the bark and limbs do speak, hoarsely …. but still. Interesting poem …. and definitely has that “fire” aftermath feel to it …. clipped and stubbled … that’s a really great word for it.
(and on another subject, glad that you’ve made a new “Frost” discovery – it is rather, a lovely poem 🙂
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🙂
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devastating and nourishing at the same time…
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The words and picture are heartbreaking
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it creates personhood in the burn victims of nature, the grasses and trees 😦
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I like the sound of the words.
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Thanks!
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Whether it is a forest fire in California or a controlled burn in Florida you so perfectly describe the feeling and smell of what has happened. Wonderfully written Kim
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Thank you so much, Christine.
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I like the sense of whirlwind throughout.
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Thank you!
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Forest fires are fairly commonplace in Australia. Eucalypt (Gum) trees however soon recover as they have that skill and can sprout leaves quite quickly again.
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I’ve heard about those fires in Oz, Robin. Eucalyptus trees are amazing – they heal themselves and us too!
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Devastating fire indeed… still it bears thinking about how we are dealing with climate and conservation and habitat world over.
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You’d think that everyone would want to do their part in saving the planet, wouldn’t you, especially after disasters, which we seem to be seeing more and more frequently. But some humans are just not bothered. We have to inundate them with our words.
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So true.. that sense of urgency to make sweeping global decisions doesn’t seem very consistent… hope it is not too late already.
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There is something so sad about this landscape — your phrasing and sounds are so well done in creating that mood and tone. I am most affected by this line: “their dry voices whisper/in devastation’s backwind”.
This whirlwind of charcoal and dust is blinding.
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Thank you, Anmol.
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Earth Wind
And Fire
Forest
Trees
Bleed
Human..:)
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🙂
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:)!!
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used and harnessed correctly fire does clear and cleanse. Maybe Mother Nature too knows when to do just that with those raging fires. I felt the soot and ash on my tongue just by reading your words
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Thank you, Gina.
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The “ack” and “iver” rhymes catch in the throat like smoke and ash. A devastated field and poem.
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I’m so pleased you got that, Brendan.
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Always a sad sight to see a burnt out tree. Great word choice in this poem.
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Thank you, Kerry.
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Nice phrase: “blackened trees shiver” I imagine those burnt trees do look like they are shivering.
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Thanks Frank.
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There is such a feeling of emptiness here Kim.
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Thank you, Linda. It’s how I imagine it must feel.
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Yes, so true.
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A sad day for those California greens. You personified them well. I like your tree picture find. I have been looking for a good Zombie tree picture, this one ties with one I took beside an old church. I need it for the “Z” letter coming up in another blog. BTW, some of our green trees have turned red after a recent early frost. That generally does not happen, first I’ve seen since leaving New England in the 60’s.
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Thank you, Jim.
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Oh, there is such noise in a fire and the hell in those flame fueled wind devils.
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Thank you, Susie.
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Your voice is calm under the devastation wrought by a wild fire. The sounds in this also snap and crack like a fire and the bursting trees and Ricks. I can smell this fire and I can gear the screams if the animals being consumed. Fires can cleanse but they also kill. Good work here Kim
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Thank you so much, Toni. 💝
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Your voice came straight through that devastating photo.
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Thank you, Sara.
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