The Clock of Tides and Stars (revised)

I smile at the clockwork birds
ploughing sand, their black legs whirring,
wound like clocks by the pull of Earth,
a splash of spangled sanderlings.

Ploughing sand, their black legs whirring,
steered here by a cosmic force,
a splash of spangled sanderlings
followed the ancient paths of stars.

Steered here by a cosmic force
from their Arctic breeding turf,
they followed ancient paths of stars
and rushed at sparkles of gushing surf.

From their Arctic breeding turf,
wound like clocks by the pull of Earth,
they rushed at sparkles of gushing surf.
I smile at the clockwork birds.

Kim M. Russell, 5th March 2019

My revised response to dVerse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar: Pantoum

Last week Gina introduced us to the pantoum. I quickly revised and posted a pantoum I wrote last April  and then went off-line for several days. Now I’m back and I’ve been reading so many wonderful pantoums, I took Lillian’s as a template and had another go at rewriting my sanderling pantoum.

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18 thoughts on “The Clock of Tides and Stars (revised)

  1. i put them side by side and read back and forth, this one has better flow without losing its impact. i like rhyming, just my style and poems with rhymes flow better for me. nice Kim! and I see you have worked hard on this, thank you

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    1. Thank you so much, Gina. I’m still catching up. I have to go to London on Friday and will miss some writing time over the weekend too. I hope to be back to normal next week and to have written at least one more pantoum.

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      1. hope you have a safe and fruitful trip, hug the little man if you see him, Nana cuddles are the best medicine. the pantoum is addictive! happy poeming Kim!

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