Wide eyes and swollen bellies, bruises on the soul:
honeyed drips of birdsong.
Kim M. Russell, 27th April 2019
My response to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Poems in April Day 27: In a Station of the Metro
Today Toni is hosting and she reminds us that there are only three more days to go until the end of this year’s NaPoWriMo.
Our prompt is a poem by Ezra Pound:
In a Station of the Metro
The apparition of these faces in the crowd:
Petals on a wet, black bough.
Toni says this poem is not only brief, it is breathtaking, and thought provoking. She goes into some depth about how this poem works.
Our challenge is to write a two-line poem in which we convey some startling image, and image that juxtaposes two images – and Toni encourages us to make our poems stark, beautiful, breathtaking or full of humour.
writing in north norfolk 
Juxtaposition utilized in such an effective manner — powerful and heartbreaking.
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Thank you, Anmol!
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Wow, that’s a stunner, KIm.
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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In two lines you have dealt a wound to my heart. Poignant and striking imagery.
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Thank you so much, Kerry!
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This so reminds of how birdsong can be combined with the most haunting images of starvation and similar.
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Thanks Bjorn.
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Oh Kim. This is truly heartbreaking. Such a powerful poem/image. I hate to use powerful and poignant as they are so overused, but you totally nailed this. The image is both strong and heartbreaking.
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Thanks Toni.
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Oh, that pose is definitely juxta! Well done!
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Thanks Ron!
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Nature is beautiful, savage, indifferent.
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Heartbreaking Kim.
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Thanks Linda.
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The stark clarity of the first line goes straight for the heart. And the ending line… well, that one takes the now exposed heart and coats it with all the hurt the suffering of children should evoke out of people with souls. You’ve written the story of a whole group, in just two line.
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Thank you so much, Magaly.
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Poor kids. Moms and Dads too. We have that in the southern border states. Coming in through Mexico from the Central American countries. Trickle down economics is no help for these, neither is the war waged by the “wanna-be” groups and gangs.
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Thanks for your comments, Jim. Sadly, there are children like this all over the world.
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Bruises on the soul indeed. As a species, we are not doing very well. Loved this one, Kim. It touches the heart.
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Thank you, Sherry.
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You’ve painted a heartwrenching story in just two lines!
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Thank you, Namy!
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Yes, powerful and heartbreaking…
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Thank you, Susie.
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Powerfully touching..
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
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