sky water wood earth
early morning elementals
broken plumbic thunderclouds
faint whiff of damp bark
and rain-softened soil
single jigsaw piece of sky
a stray ray of sunshine
silvers the rioting dill
pearled with raindrops
from the last smur*
sky water wood earth
Kim M. Russell, 2nd June 2020
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Rain, also linked to Poets and Storytellers United Writers’ Pantry
Sarah is back, posting from the south-west corner of England, where they have a lot of rain.
Sarah says she doesn’t usually think about rain very much at all, and I can concur that over the last few weeks we’ve had glorious sunshine, and hardly any rain at all. Not being used to extremes, we have no experience of severe droughts or monsoons, we just have occasional floods. As Sarah says, rain is an essential part of our local landscapes.
Sarah has shared poems about rain, one by a favourite poet of mine, Seamus Heaney, and another by Mary Oliver.
Tonight, Sarah wants rainy poems: city rain, desert rain, rain that falls in the forest, kissing rain-wet lips, rain on a bus window, drizzle, mizzle, a soft day, a raging storm, sad rain, happy rain, or the rain that comes as a relief.
*smur – Norfolk dialect word for drizzle.
Oh, lovely, Kim. I should have known you’d find beauty in the rain. I love the preciousness of your semantic field in the last stanza – all that glistening and glimmering.
I believe the weather changes tomorrow, but I don’t think it’s my fault for doing this prompt!
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Smiles! The rain is needed and I love it anyway. It’s only tomorrow. The sun will be back for Thursday.
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Kim, I always love it when you write poems about nature! Your descriptive skill is superb. I love “rioting dill pearled with raindrops” and oh yes, I love the smell of that spring/summer rain as it soaks into the earth. Ah….and how fun to have a bit of a lesson in the Nordic dialect! Love just saying that word! 🙂
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Thank you so much, Lill! Sadly the dill was strimmed recently, but it will grow back. I have some in a little pot. I’m looking forward to a bit of smur tomorrow. Have you ever heard of a loke or a bishy barney bee? 😉
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Thank you so much Lill! We’re expecting smur tomorrow. Have you every heard of a loke or a bishy barney bee?
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This is so wonderful… I especially love the scent in the poem… it’s just lovely.
You make me wish for rain actually…
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What a lovely comment, Björn! We’re expecting rain tomorrow and I have my Wellington boots at the ready.
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yes you conjured the welcome rain and I especially liked how you broke the stanzas with this line:
“single jigsaw piece of sky”
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Thank you, Laura.
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I like the description of the clouds: “broken plumbic thunderclouds”
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Thank you, Frank.
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I like how you laid out the poem, including beginning and ending with the same line. My favorite part, which is such a lively visual:
“a stray ray of sunshine
silvers the rioting dill”
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Thanks Lisa. 😊
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You’re welcome.
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This is like a feast for the senses.
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Thank you, Ken.
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This is almost like a magic spell- I love it Kim.
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Thank, Linda.
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a magic spell or feng shui advice, a nice rythm
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I like that, feng shui advice!
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“silvers the rioting dill
pearled with raindrops
from the last smur*” ….. love this and the new word
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Thank you!
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The landscape here has also been loving the rain. I like the idea of rioting dill. (K)
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Sadly, it is rioting no more. My husband went out to tidy up , and when I looked, it was gone. I’m growing more in a pot.
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I love the smell of dill. Ok, most herbs.
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Me too.
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kaykuala
faint whiff of damp bark
and rain-softened soil
There is a nice aromatic feel of wet bark after a bout of rain, yes!
Hank
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Thanks Hank!
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Yes, I enjoyed the highlighting of that riotous dill too 🙂
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😊
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two new words- plumbic amd smur – both exciting and rather onomatopoeic. Thanks Kim. Really liked the repetition of first and last elementals – speaks tio the seasonal nature of the garden my fav was:
“silvers the rioting dill”
Dill does love to bolt!
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Thank you so much Christine!
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You really have a way of provoking all the senses. I’ve never thought of clouds as resembling lead
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Thank you so much, Larry!
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I like the way your stanza reflects each of the first line items.
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Thank you Dwight.
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Some great takeaways here — that thunderclouds could be “broken plumbic” and Norfolk has as many names for rain (“smur”!) as Eskimos for snow. – Brendan
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Cheers Brendan!
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Lovely descriptions–the faint scent of the wet bark, the silvering and glistening– and I liked the repetition of the first line–an emphasizing of elements and nature. I didn’t know “plumbic,” so thank you for that! 😀
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I’m glad you like it, Merril! 😉
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Lovely elevenses poetry ….. sighing as I read. And I learned a new word!
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Thank you, Helen!
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Very nice. I love, “slivers the rioting dill…” So good!
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Thank you!
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We should always admire nature at work to witness the beauty of the seasons, which do their job regardless of of humanity who still think it is all being done for them!
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I am so thankful for nature, especially in the current circumstances.
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An absolutely lovely picture in words.
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(Just one point – in elevensies, the middle or pivot line is also considered the title.)
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Oops! I’ll keep that in mind for the next one. 😉
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Thank you, Rosemary.
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Thinking about the sky as a jigsaw puzzle, so hard to put together. And even the word jigsaw gets me. Love the line about dill.
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Thank you, Colleen!
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This is absolutely gorgeous, Kim! I love; “a stray ray of sunshine silvers the rioting dill pearled with raindrops from the last smur.” 💝💝
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Thank you, Sanaa! 🙂
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Lovely. Hoping for showers to cut the heat here. 🙂
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Thank you, Wyndolynne, You’re welcome to some of our rain, it won’t stop!
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Smur, eh? A great poem and thanks for added vocab!
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🙂
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This is a feast for the senses, Kim. I love the way you’ve shaped the scents, how your descriptive magic makes me think of parsley wearing bejeweled armor. And I love, love, love the symmetry of the beginning and ending mirroring each other.
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Thank you, Magaly. Simple gifts of nature are so important at the moment,.
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Gentle and beautiful–I too love the rain–
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Thank you!
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i love how your poem has an ethereal tone. reminds me of my teenage years. when i was so obsessed with the earth and sky and somewhat. great write, brings back fond memories!
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I’m glad you like it and it brought back memories.
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“A single jizsaw piece of sky”…I love that line. This is lovely Kim!
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Thank you, Carrie!
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Oh I’m always going to say “smur” now… how beautiful is that word and that scene…!
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🙂
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wow! pearled with raindrops. i like that line
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
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