mysterious landscapes
rise and unfold before my eyes
worlds of clouds
Chèvrefeuille
mysterious landscapes
windless rain among the trees
misting my glasses
rise and unfold before my eyes
hills grey and invisible
a foggy haunting
worlds of clouds
dark shadows until a break
reveals honey light
mysterious landscapes
everything brown and silver
flickered with leaf sound
windless rain among the trees
magpie on bare branch
one for sorrow
misting my glasses
the tears of former winters
salt-tang of the sea
rise and unfold before my eyes
mounds of bladderwrack
brought in on the tide
hills grey and invisible
the prospect of a village
prostrate at its foot
a foggy haunting
in empty break-of-dawn streets
houses just waking
worlds of clouds
rain-filled and peopled with ghosts
drifting in drizzle
dark shadows until a break
spreading across the sky’s face
a tentative smile
reveals honey light
behind the grubby blanket
of a winter’s day
Kim M. Russell, 12th December 2020
My response to Carpe Diem #1841 Just a special challenge. also linked to Poets and Storytellers United Writer’s Pantry
Today we have a challenge to create a double Troiku with the given haiku by Chèvrefeuille. It’s a tough challenge, whereby we first create a Troiku with three new haiku from the given haiku, and then create three haiku from the separated lines of the three new haiku, resulting in 2 new haiku.
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I think you rose to the challenge Kim, this is lovely!
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Cheers Ingrid!
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‘Tears of former winters’ is such a beautiful line. I got what the challenge meant after reading yours. Beautifully done.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
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The mist on the glasses, I find, adds an extra layer of mystery. I like the way each verse both gives way and flows into the next. (K)
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Thank you, Kerfe. Double troiku are tricky!
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Reading this recalled my days of childhood as one discovered the world. In those days youngsters used explore woods and forests, walk bare foot in streams and rivers as there was no such thing as TV! When we got home we listened to the radio when serials of all sorts could be listened to and imagine the scene as actors spoke their lines!
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I remember a childhood like that too!
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I love where that led you!
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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Double troiku, interesting!!!
Happy Sunday
Much💗love
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Thank you, Gillena. Happy Sunday!❤
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My kind of haunting – foggy, makes me still, worried there might be something else after the “windless rain among the trees…” If I could like this poem several times, I would.
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Thanks so much, Hazel!
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Wintry misty and grey. Well done!
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Thanks!
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This is beautiful! A mysterious landscape swirls through the lines.
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Thank you, Wyndolynne!
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Oh, I could never. But you MASTERED it,KR!
Wonderfully wonderfilled.
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Muchas gracias, Ron!
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Difficult challenge?? I call this challenge way beyond difficult. You mastered it. Mastered it!
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Thank you, Helen! You’re so kind.😊
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This is really impressive, Kim. The sequence is so smooth that one can almost believe that the work was easy. But I’m sure the truth speaks of fine attention to detail. I really enjoyed how you created a picture out of each line, how you added to your masterpiece as you moved forward.
This is one of my favorites: “a foggy haunting / in empty break-of-dawn streets / houses just waking”. It brings to mind the fog that engulfed my neighborhood yesterday. I can see my hometown in your words. I really like that. 🙂
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Thank you, Magaly. It was a difficult sequence and I was surprised at how it turned out. That is my favourite too!😊
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A lovely write, Kim. I must admit, reading the Carpe Diem challenge just made me want to run screaming into the night. I applaud your courage!
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Thank you, Bev! I was a bit taken aback by the prompt at first, as the first three haiku created from the given one have to work when they too are made into new ones.
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Absolutely beautiful You painted an amazing landscape Love the French word and my favourite lines are “everything brown and silver
flickered with leaf sound” and “the tears of former winters salt-tang of the sea”
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Dank u wel Marja!
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Beautifully done!!!
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Thank you!
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You delivered a beautiful double as asked for Kim! Great lines!
Hank
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Thanks Hank!
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A nice bit of creativity for a challenging form.
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Thanks Marilyn!
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This would have been a fun writing project. You can ‘bend’ ti to wherever you want it o go. I liked your trail. I envisioned a small but not too disillusioned youngster on the subway (tube) stairs asleep under his precious winter blanket.
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Thanks so much, Jim!
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Beautiful!
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Thank you, Ruben!
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