furious kicking
keeps her afloat in the wake
of fast tourist boats
white swan – snowflake on water
a lost echo of winter
© Kim M. Russell, 2016

My response to Carpe Diem Special Japanese Poetry In The Lowlands #3 Ria Giskes “six swans” (tanka)
In this new episode of Chèvrefeuille’s CD Special about Japanese Poetry In The Lowlands, he has shared tanka by Ria Giskes.
losgelaten –
ver van de boom drijven ze
op het water
waar de stroom ze meevoert
naar het onbekende
released –
far from the tree they float
on the water
where the stream carries them
into the unknown
zes zwanen
middenin een tapijt
van veren –
rondom de kappersstoel
mijn witte plukjes haar
six swans
in the middle of a carpet
feathers –
around the barber chair
my white tufts of hair
© Ria Giske (Tr. Chèvrefeuille)
Very nice. Odd paralell though, a snowflake and swan. Not usually a symbol of winter
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“snowflake on water” I love that!
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Thanks Merril!
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Such a glorious portrait. 🌹
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😊
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How lovely, great tanka.
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Thank you!
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Nicely crafted.
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Very well created tanka. I am glad you did like the poetry of Ria Giskes.
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I was thinking snow too…especially since we had our first snowstorm of season today.
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A snowstorm! Not sure I like the sound of that. Gentle flakes please!
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