allusive
brush of mist and dew
dissolves fields
the landscape
becomes a swirling maelstrom
trees are beaching whales
Kim M. Russell, 2017
My response to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Fussy Little Forms: Shadorma
This week Marian is hosting the weekend mini-challenge; she says she was thinking about how she’s been a bit stuck lately, not very productive, finding it challenging to write for many reasons. She says that trying to write in tight verse or constrained lines can help get her going when she’s stuck. So, she’s inviting us to join her in a monthly exercise focused on short and/or fussy form poems.
We’re starting off easy with a shadorma: a six-line poem (or series of six-line stanzas); a syllable count by line of 3-5-3-3-7-5; and it’s not rhymed.
That last line really took my imagination to the next level. A lovely example of shadorma.
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Thank you, Kerry.
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This is really impressive work on the form, Kim!💕 Kudos.
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Thank you, Sanaa! 💞
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I agree with Kerry that the last line makes the poem take flight.
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😊
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Yes, yes… and bonus points for “allusive” !! Wonderful.
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Thank you, Marian!
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I love the allusive surrealism
namaste
JzB
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a well ‘painted’ shadorma, Kim
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Thank you, Candy.
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Excellent! 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Thank you, Dorna!
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Yes, wonderful last line, following great descriptions.
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brush of mist and dew
dissolves fields
It can very well make the landscape appear eerie and mysterious!
Hank
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Thanks for reading and commenting, Hank!
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Kim this is breathtaking….yes that last line is sheer perfection!
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Thank you, Carrie!
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A truly lovely example of the form. the picture? the more I stare at it, the clearer the images become.
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Thank you, Toni!
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Imagination mist born… this is beautiful
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Thank you, Susie!
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