My response to Carpe Diem #948 brush
clouds layered above
shallow billowing valleys
their motionless lines
broken only by wood smoke
kettle boils on open fire
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Image found on www.nowzipit.co.uk
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Really, really good. In fact quite special and makes me wonder if just a little more can be done with a tanka.
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Thank you. I think the tanka is more flexible than the haiku – you can add just a little something more – although the haiku is more disciplined.
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Short and snappy Kim.
xxx Huge Hugs xxx
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Very vivid image. I think they yugen comes from the contrast between still valleys and moving smoke.
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I also think the yugen could come from the kettle adding steam to the clouds.
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So warm and inviting!
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