My response to Carpe Diem Tokubetsudesu #88 Back In Time “Revise That Haiku”

Chèvrefeuille has challenged us to ‘revise’ the following classical haiku written by Shiki (1867-1902), based on asymmetry in nature, and write a new one:

Daibutsu no katahada no yuki toki ni keri

the snow has melted

on one shoulder

of the Great Buddha


© Shiki



the tallest willow

throws its wide shadow on one

side of the garden


© Kim M. Russell, 2016


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