My response to Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie Writing Prompt #169 “Collage Special Edition”
That year of our childhood,
We picked berries,
Squeezed their shiny plumpness
Until their blood ran red.
Intoxicated by the bitter sweetness
And our summer freedom,
We tottered down to the mill pond
And clambered on the abandoned
Lichen-stained waterwheel,
Anchored in a snarl of chickweed.
Our feet beat tattoos
On the wooden slats
Above the stagnant ooze.
In the hubbub of our joyous shouts,
Verbose frogs and whining gnats,
We didn’t hear the water spatter
Or, if we did, it didn’t matter,
There were so many of us there,
Someone else was taking care.
Later, when we gathered round
To saunter back,
Along the dusty track,
Nobody noticed she was gone;
An only child, she walked alone,
Outside sibling groups and family news,
A tidy girl with polished shoes,
While the rest of us ran around on bare feet.
It wasn’t until after teatime,
When light was fading down our street,
I brought father his jug of evening
Wine and, while I waited for his blessing,
My eye was drawn to the study window,
Where water trickled down the pane
And a small hand in the darkling shadow
Waved –
Or was it drowning?
© Kim M. Russell, 2016

The quote “And who among us poets has not adulterated his wine?” is from Nietzsche.
I am speechless! Wow the descriptions in this, the feet beating tattoos, the haunting imagery in the end, brilliant
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Thank you so much for such enthusiastic comments – I’m delighted my poem had that effect!
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I agree with Yves! I will be haunted by the ending for some time.
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I have to agree with the others equal parts innocent in “feet beating tattoos” and the waving or drowning
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Thank you for reading and commenting 🙂
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a truly imaginative piece conjuring amazing imagery and a haunted end. I especially like ‘A tidy girl with polished shoes’ contrast with the bare tatooing feet –
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Thanks for reading and for your comments, Laura.
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