My response to Carpe Diem Theme Week (6) 3 The knowledge of Jane
In this Theme Week episode Chèvrefeuille has shared an article, “Another Attempt to Define Haiku”, written by Jane Reichhold in 1996. He has asked us to comment on what we have learnt from her and to share haiku and tanka inspired by the article.
What I have learnt is that an absolute indicator of a haiku is a break or caesura either at the end of the first or second line and that the “run-on sentence”, which is usually a sentence fragment, should be avoided. I have taken an old haiku I wrote last year and re-worked it following this principle:
Dawn’s grey penumbrae,
Shattered by luminous rays,
Lifted like a veil.
© Kim M. Russell, 2015
luminous rays
shatter dawn’s grey penumbrae
a lifted veil
© Kim M. Russell, 2016

Really nicely reworked.
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Thank you!
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Like the reworked version. Good job
Much love…
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