dragonfly wings
red blur in the cherry tree
sour fruit falls
Kim M. Russell, 27th May 2018
My response to Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #34 Revise That Haiku … Kikaku’s Dragonfly
In the last weekend Meditation of May our challenge is to revise a haiku by a classical haiku poet, attempting to improve the haiku without losing the scene it’s about. For this episode we have a haiku by Kikaku (1661-1707), one of Basho’s disciples:
red dragonfly
break off its wings
sour cherry
© Kikaku
writing in north norfolk 
Alright, you have the right one linked now. I rather liked this prompt of revising another’s haiku didn’t you? I like what you came up with, Kim, well done!
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Thanks Gayle! This is one of my favourite prompts on Carpe Diem.
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I can see why!
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