It’s the vivid season when colours are like
splashes from an artist’s palette:
ochre fields
untold shades of leaves and grasses
tumbling petals in various shades of pink and yellow.
Yesterday brought the first flashes of metallic red and blue
zipping in and out
of willow leaves and nettles,
hovering above ponds and rivers.
electric shimmers
dragon-flying in the haze
sultry shadow play
Kim M. Russell, 25th June 2018
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Haibun Monday: Unconventional
Jilly is our bar-tender this Monday. She says she’s here to rattle the cages of structure and suggest some non-traditional writing in the realm of the haibun form. She reminds us of that a conventional haibun is a combination of prose poetry and haiku; the prose portion is usually one or two concise paragraphs followed by a traditional haiku that serves as a post-script to the prose.
In the strictest sense, a haibun includes a traditional kigo, normally in the second line, that gives the reader a road sign regarding the season. Jilly wants to encourage innovation: she says that seasons are nebulous and traditional kigo are based on the seasons in only one part of the world. Elsewhere, we have such things as a dry season, fire season, rainy season, tourist season, monsoon and hurricane seasons. Anyone in education is familiar with exam season – I’m an exam marker and ex-teacher, so I know that one well. Above all, Jilly wants us to be avant garde, unconventional, to bend and break the rules!
Oh! Your form! It’s a dragonfly in its pure essence! So well captured 🙂
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Thank you, Jill! Sorry I couldn’t stay to read and comment but I had a bad night. I’m up and about and ready for some unconventional hiabun. 🙂
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Hate those bad nights – hope there is rest in your day 🙂
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I had to cancel a hospital appointment but have been using the time I gained from that to mark exam papers – I’m a glutton for punishment!
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The heart of a teacher
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Paint kigo! I enjoy poetry that brings the pallet to bear. …and dragonflies!
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Thanks Charley!
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You are welcome!
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Love all those electric colors of the dragon fly… I can see them in my memory circling the pond (and would work well also in a Japanese setting I think)
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Thank you, Bjorn.
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This piece really captures the beauty of summer.
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Thank you, Carol.
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Loving the shape here……and the beautiful imagery.
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Thank you, Lill! I’m just about to start reading and commenting.
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I’m not sure….but I do like your haibun, Kim….not sure about the unconventuality asked…but so it goes. Haibun is such a marvelous and broad form.
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Thank you, Jane. I struggled at first but I started to get into the unconventional bit.Unfortunately, I wasn’t at all well yesterday and had a bad night but I’m ready to read and comment – can’t wait to see what everyone else did with the prompt!
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Beautiful.
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Thank you 🙂
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I love the shape and the vivid imagery in your poem!
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Thank you, Jo!
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Nice departure from pure tradition. I am fond of of varying the linebreaks, and forming patterns on the page. Yours moved like the insects, and its overview was delicious, reminding us that the finest art still pales when compared to nature itself.
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Thank you, Glenn.
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Nice word: “dragonflying”. They are very colorful.
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Thanks Frank.
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I love dragonfly season. Mainly I see mine zooming in overhead when I’m in the pool, clinging to the tallest limbs of bushes or flowers in the pots that rim the pool, forming chains and enlivening the air. Your poem succeeded in surprising. For a moment I thought this was lightning invading your peaceful world.
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🙂
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Dragon flies do look like they are lit up! They are beautiful amazing creatures! Great post.
Dwight
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Thank you, Dwight.
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A beautiful and vivid write!
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Thank you, Viv!
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😊
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You definitely painted a vivid season with your words, Kim! Dragonflies are alluring.
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Thanks Lynn!
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I love the colors from the artist’s palette – dazzling and electrifying as dragon flying ~
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Thank you, Grace.
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Amazing insects, beautiful summer haibun!
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Thank you, Kathy!
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You captured so well the iridescence of the shimmery colors of the creature and the aura it creates in the atmosphere to make a vibrant “vivid season.”
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Thank you, Amaya.
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What a unique use of concrete poetry as the prose partition of the haibun! I love the fluidity of your language, which beautifully portrays the dragonfly in flight!
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Thank you so much, Frank. I enjoyed writing this.
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My pleasure, Kim! 😇
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The vivid season–I love it. The weaving of colors throughout this poem makes it such a wonderful read.
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Thank you, Victoria.
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Your dragon fly makes a perfect, flitting, conventional unconventional kigo!
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🙂
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