Another disappointment

I submitted this response to Shakespeare’s Sonnet 12 to a competition and once again my poem was not selected. Where am I going wrong?

Response to Sonnet 12

 I shall not watch the hands that tell the time,

For fear of days that hasten into night;

The face I loved to touch when in its prime,

Is wrinkled now behind a beard of white;

Our mutual past is captured in a book

And photographs collected in a box,

To reminisce we only have to look,

Not count the hours and minutes on a clock;

The beauty of my love is held inside,

His touch, his words, his generosity;

Such things as these can never be denied,

Despite tenacious time’s velocity;

The photographs remind us of our truth

And illustrate our everlasting youth.

 

©Kim M. Russell, 2015

2 thoughts on “Another disappointment

  1. It’s actually a pretty good sonnet! The rhymes flow nicely and the lines have a good sense of rhythm.

    All I can say is don’t take things like this to heart. It’s such a subjective craft. Were another person to have judged the contest entries, you may have won.

    -T

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