My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Summit in sight guest-hosted by Lynn, who blogs at A Poem in my Pocket
At
first
it lurks
behind
shrouds
of clouds
shredded
by shards
longing for
sun to thaw
its carapace
of snow and ice
expose to sky
a perfect map of
silver river veins
craggy rocks and
mossy paths through
hump and hummock
outcrop knoll and ridge
engine roars wings dip
snapshot of a tiny village
scattered red Lego bricks
amongst weather – bent trees
and mirrored melted l a k e s like
lenses of sunglasses as it passes
overhead just the sharp shadow
of the plane and me in my window
seat with my birds-eye mountain view
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Very good form, apt words and well thought.
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Thanks, Jacqui!
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A pleasure Kim 🙂
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I really like this window-seat view, Kim, where I can admire the “carapace of snow and ice”, “silver river veins”, “hump and hummock” and “tiny village of scattered red Lego bricks”! Thanks for your response.
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Thank you, Lynn 🙂
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Very lovely language of the mountains.
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Oh wow, great form and what a picture. Well done!
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Thank you for your kind comments 😉
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Absolutely inspiring 🙂
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Thank you, Sanaa 😊
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I love the view from the plane Kim ~ I specially admire this part:
silver river veins
craggy rocks and
mossy paths through
hump and hummock
I also like the format of the words, shaping the mountain 🙂
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Thank you for your kind comments, Grace 😊
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This is great, Kim, from the words you use to the form in the shape of a mountain. I especially loved: “a perfect map of/silver river veins/craggy rocks and/mossy paths through/hump and hummock/outcrop knoll and ridge…” That bird’s eye view gave you the perfect vantage point!
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Thank you. I was a bit worried that the shape wouldn’t transfer from the Word document to WordPress but it wasn’t too bad. It’s better in its original format though. I think next time I’ll post shape poems as jpegs. It was so exciting seeing the tops of mountains from a plane, considering where I live is so flat. 😊
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Your descriptions allow me to experience the emergence of the mountain tops with you. Perfect!
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Thanks Victoria 😊
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Love this tumble of words from on high…lovely surprise…the view at the end. 🙂
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Thank you for your kind comments, Hannah. 😊
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Loved the image of the Lego bricks.
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A lovely piece and a great photo.
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Thank you so much 🙂
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That’s quite picturesque, and great imagery. I like your position for mountain viewing. Good overall look
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Thank you 🙂
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Those mossy paths offer great adventures; thank you for taking us along on yours!
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Thank you for coming along for the ride 🙂
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We see so much more from there than terra-firma could provide! A wonderful depiction of your “birds-eye” view, Kim!
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Thank you, Walt 😊
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Imagine the view from space shuttles that we will perhaps fly in one day. This is a daring & creative way to lay out the piece, as one’s eyes plummet down the sides of it; almost induced my vertigo.
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It looked better single-spaced when I typed it in Word. You could see clouds and rivers in it, which I had created with white space and emboldened words. I couldn’t get WordPress to format it the way I wanted. I think next time I might convert it into a jpeg.
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