Mountain View from a Window Seat

 

My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Summit in sight guest-hosted by Lynn, who blogs at A Poem in my Pocket

 

At

first

it lurks

behind

shrouds

of         clouds

shredded

by        shards

longing for

sun   to thaw

its   carapace

of snow and ice

expose    to sky

a perfect   map of

silver river      veins

craggy rocks     and

mossy paths    through

hump and    hummock

outcrop knoll    and ridge

engine roars     wings dip

snapshot of a     tiny village

scattered red    Lego bricks

amongst weather – bent trees

and mirrored melted  l a k e s  like

lenses of sunglasses   as it passes

overhead just the sharp shadow

of the plane and me in my window

seat with my birds-eye mountain view

© Kim M. Russell, 2016

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29 thoughts on “Mountain View from a Window Seat

  1. I really like this window-seat view, Kim, where I can admire the “carapace of snow and ice”, “silver river veins”, “hump and hummock” and “tiny village of scattered red Lego bricks”! Thanks for your response.

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  2. I love the view from the plane Kim ~ I specially admire this part:

    silver river veins

    craggy rocks and

    mossy paths through

    hump and hummock

    I also like the format of the words, shaping the mountain 🙂

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  3. This is great, Kim, from the words you use to the form in the shape of a mountain. I especially loved: “a perfect map of/silver river veins/craggy rocks and/mossy paths through/hump and hummock/outcrop knoll and ridge…” That bird’s eye view gave you the perfect vantage point!

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    1. Thank you. I was a bit worried that the shape wouldn’t transfer from the Word document to WordPress but it wasn’t too bad. It’s better in its original format though. I think next time I’ll post shape poems as jpegs. It was so exciting seeing the tops of mountains from a plane, considering where I live is so flat. 😊

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  4. Imagine the view from space shuttles that we will perhaps fly in one day. This is a daring & creative way to lay out the piece, as one’s eyes plummet down the sides of it; almost induced my vertigo.

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    1. It looked better single-spaced when I typed it in Word. You could see clouds and rivers in it, which I had created with white space and emboldened words. I couldn’t get WordPress to format it the way I wanted. I think next time I might convert it into a jpeg.

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