My response to dVerse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar – Form: Tanka
Toni is our host this evening and we are exploring the Tanka. I have three to share: the first is one I wrote earlier this year and the second and third have been reworked.
rising fragrant steam
hovers above the tea cup
waiting for two lips
to press against porcelain
and taste sweet jasmine flowers
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Image found on boisdejasmin.com
Aphrodite’s quince
eaten to perfume a kiss
from seductive lips –
pink petals of spring unfold
autumn’s perfumed orbs are gold
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Image found on Wikipedia
rich queen of fabric
spun out of silken cocoon
dyed red and yellow –
sumptuous seduction
of fluttering kimono
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Image found on Pinterest
writing in north norfolk 
I love the second tanka most specially, with the turn on the spring and autumn. But all 3 are lovely Kim.
Cheers!
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Thank you, Grace!
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Splendid. I loved them all and the imagery. Delicate and intriguing.
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Thank you for your kind comments.
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My pleasure. 🙂
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I could certainly use a cup of tea right now. Loved the third tanka, but all three were great.
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Thank you!
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They are all very lovely, but if you asked me to pick just one it would be the first one.
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Thank you, Truedessa! That’s the one I wasn’t sure about, as it doesn’t seem to follow the structure as described by Toni.
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Kim, these are just beautiful…I’m so impressed. I especially love your second sensuous tanka with the fluttering kimono.
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I’m pleased you like them Gayle, although I don’t think the first one follows the rules as explained by Toni. I was hoping someone would comment on that and possibly make a suggestion 😉
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Oh that kimono, like a flower almost. Love it
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When I was a little girl living with my grandparents, my grandmother had a beautiful kimono that was brought back from her uncle’s travels as a deep sea diver. It was my favourite dressing up item!
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All so beautiful and things I can relate to! I’ve never had Jasmine tea, but I know the waiting tea cup well. 🙂 I enjoy most fruits including quince – even the word has a special sound. And the kimono fabric? My favorite of all because I love to weave. Thank you, Kim!
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Thank you for reading and commenting! Jasmine tea is delicate and not as perfumed as you might think – not as sweet as rose petal tea. We have a very old quince tree in our garden which still produces some fruit that seems to drop when we’re not looking and the deer usually snaffle them before we get a chance!
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Gosh this is an absolute treat! ❤ Especially love the images of ‘pink petals of spring unfold’ and ‘autumn’s perfumed orbs are gold’ ❤ Beautifully executed.
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Glad I tickled your tanka fancy, Sanaa! Love, Kim xxx
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Very nice series, and first special.
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Thank you, Hamish.
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Love the second one but LOVE the third one. The shift to the sumptuous seduction of the kimono is breathtaking – I actually let out a loud sigh!
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😋
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All the are lovely. I especially enjoyed that steamy romance with the cup of tea!
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Thanks for reading, Bryan 🙋
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what a treat this tanka threesome – impressionistically fleeting like the kimono and the pressed lips – pure delight
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Thank you for reading, Laura!
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Sacred cup of
flesh.. two hands
come together..
for sweet tea
of Water..:)
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🍵🌛
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⛳️..:)
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I love the first one. Waiting for that first sip of tea – lovely in the longing for and the quiet sensuality in this. I truly like the other two very much but the first one – oh.my.goodness.
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Thank you, Toni 🍵
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