riversong
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold
© Jane Reichhold
ripe notes of nuts and berries
eddy in a whirl of leaves
weeping skies
rain soaks fallen foliage
diluting colour
russet fading into grey
seasonal evanescence
bonfires burn
detritus and dank decay
curling on the air
musical sigh of the breeze
comforting denuded trees
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
My response to Carpe Diem Universal Jane #3 riversong
Today we have a new episode of the special feature in honour of Jane Reichhold, in which Chèvrefeuille has reminded us that Jane was a poetess not only of haiku but also tanka, as well as being one of the leading souls in the art of renga, or chained verse, in which we can create poetry together through interaction and association. He has shared an example:
shadows of leaves
cover the open holes
her flute forgotten (© Jane Reichhold)
caressing summer breeze
enchanted melody rises (© Chèvrefeuille)
Chèvrefeuille has challenged us to create a tan renga with the following autumn haiku (“hokku”) by Jane Reichhold, taken from the online version of her book A Dictionary of Haiku:
riversong
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold
© Jane Reichhold
We should create a second stanza to this ‘hokku’ by Jane with two lines (approximately following 7-7 syllables).
He has also give us an additional challenge: to create a Soliloquy no Renga with this ‘hokku’ by Jane. A Soliloquy no Renga is a renga written by one poet with a maximum of eight stanzas. The last stanza is the ‘ageku’ and must close the chain by linking to the first stanza, the ‘hokku’.
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Lovely, you did beautifully, it is inspiring to read.
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Thank you! I actually find it difficult to continue from or complete other poets’ writing. It’s a real challenge, which I suppose is why I have to do it!
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I have not tried it yet but must do so in order to improve. You did exceptionally well.
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I loved these lines a lot:
russet fading into grey
seasonal evanescence
Somewhere hits a feeling of loss..
wonderfully written… 🙂
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Thank you for reading and for your kind comments, Vijita. 🙂
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Really a great circular response. Love what started as a song ends as a comforting breeze.
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I enjoyed this prompt very much and the poem had a fairly easy birth. 😊
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Your poetry always conveys such beautiful stories. 🌹
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Thank you!
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Repeating myself, I just wanted to say, ‘Thank You for sharing your words, writings with us.’ 🙂
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Thank you for reading! 😊
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Wow Kim you have created a smooth flowing Soliloquy no Renga inspired on that beauty by Jane. Well done. In ancient times renga was mostly done by a group of poets and this “solo – renga” is a real challenge. I even think soli-renga can help us to improve our skills.
Really a nice response.
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Thank you, Kristjaan. I’m just reading comments and then I’ll be over to Carpe Diem for the Full Circle!
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Awesome to hear that. I love commenting on all the posts, but I am behind with it. Just lack of time.
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musical sigh of the breeze
comforting denuded trees
Eddy actions of the leaves curling in the air – can almost see it in front of the eyes! Great usage of words Kim!
Hank
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Thanks Hank!
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Beautiful images. I like the words you found for the unique olfactory experience: ‘detritus and dank decay’.
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Thank you, Janice!
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