January frost
petals freezing one by one
brittle tears of ice
Kim M. Russell, 2018

My response to Carpe Diem Weekend-meditation #14 Revise That Haiku
This weekend our challenge is to ‘revise that haiku’: re-create or revise a given haiku by a classical haiku poet, to which Chèvrefeuille has given us the background story. This time he has chosen a haiku by Matsuo Basho (1644-1694).He asks us to read the background, try to become one with the scene, or in other words ‘try to be Basho’, look at the haiku again and try to ‘revise’ it:
chi ni taore me ni yori hana no wakare kana
falling to the ground
a flower closer to the root
bidding farewell
© Matsuo Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)
Tuesday will be the first anniversary of my mother’s death.
Marvelous! 😎🥀
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Thanks Dorna!
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Beutiful
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Thank you, Livinia.
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Great rewrite.
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Thank you, Janice!
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Awesome revision Kim ..
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Thank you, Kristjaan.
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The imagery is awesome!
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Thank you, Viv!
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Why do snow-dusted petals look delicious?
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It could be the sparkle, the coolness of the ice or the sugar-like quality. I know what you mean!
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A sad but fitting remembrance.
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Thank you, Ken.
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Lovely work.
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Thank you kindly.
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