between dusty cars
an orange butterfly flits
the traffic rumbles
Kim M. Russell, 26th August 2018
My response to Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #47 quest for a (new) masterpiece
For this weekend’s meditation we have been challenged to create masterpieces, haiku (or tanka) that will survive over the years like Basho’s ‘old pond’. We can choose our own themes but our masterpieces must follow the classical rules.
writing in north norfolk 
Some lean on “road rage,” the orange butterfly bring us back to earth. I love it.
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Thank you so much, Annell!
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For some reason when I first came, the image wasn’t there? But I see you have selected the amazing Monarch, he was present when my Mom died. So meaningful for me. My Mom lived in Texas, and he was gathering the last of the nectar before he began his journey across the Gulf back home to Mexico. It seemed he took my Mother with him when he left. He is a beauty to keep in one’s heart.
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I hope your poem lasts for all times!!
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Thank you, Annell!
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A beautiful image of the butterfly in your haiku Kim, I hope she finds her way back to the flowers 🙂💖🦋 xxx
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Thank you, Xenia 🌸🌸🌸😊 xxx
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I followed you initially for two reasons. We both love writing and you are not many miles from us, we are just outside Norwich. I am loving your Haikus xxx
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Hello Juli G! So pleased to meet you and that you are loving my haiku. 🙂 xxx
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Oh! another Fantabulous set of scenes! (@–>–)
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Thank you, Dorna!🌞
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Love the juxtaposition here!
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Thank you!
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I like your haiku. It does have a classical quality yet also reflects the age we live in. Well done.
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Thank you, Suzanne.
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Nice juxtaposition in this one; and also a kind fragment and phrase. Very well done … Your haiku paints a wonderful scene with the beauty of the classics like Onitsura and Basho. This is a haiku that will survive time … a masterpiece.
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Thank you so much, Kristjaan!
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Dear Kim,
I have chosen this haiku for todays Tan Renga Challenge. I hope that’s okay !
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A short reply because my internet is so erratic – of course, Kristjaan!
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This really is a stunning Haiku Kim! It seems to be a perfect balance of the “gritty” realistic and the sublime, fleeting beauty. And the more I sit with it, the happier I get – with a sunshiny orange monarch butterfly smile ~ so kudos to you!
[and I hope I did it justice with my tan renga; it certainly had me inspired to think on things in a different way!]
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Than kyou! I will be reading and commenting later today and over the weekend. 😉
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