a slant of sunlight
cutting a cloud of dust motes
spring cleaning begins
Kim M. Russell, 13th April 2019
My response to Carpe Diem’s Light Retreat 2019: The Joy of Light
The penultimate haiku In our retreat, in which we had 30 days to create haiku and tanka on the theme of The Joy of Light.
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Hi Kim,
I’m liking your blog and love your haiku poems especially. While I’ve been ‘Nature Writing’ for a while I’m new to haiku. Your recent haiku of the Brimstone butterfly and Goldfinch prompted me to have a go at a couple of my own …
goldfinch sing
harmonic colours
of aural alchemy
morning glory
ethereal beauty
of holly blue
Best Wishes
Clive (another blogger following you from North Wales)
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Clive. I enjoyed your haiku very much. You could change ‘sing’ to ‘song’, omit the word ‘of’ and still retain their beauty and meaning, and the lines can be reversed too!. Best wishes, Kim
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Reading this again I see you meant that the word ‘of’ was superfluous to both – sorry!
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Thank you Kim – that works really well. Perhaps it will work for the ‘holly blue’ one as well
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