Photo-shopping Basho

autumn arrives
breathing sighs into my ear
a pillow of wind

Kim M. Russell, 28^th April 2019

My response to Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #82 Introducing a new feature: photo-shopping haiku

This weekend we have a new feature, revising a haiku in a similar way to photo-shopping: just a little change to make the difference between a good and an excellent haiku (or tanka). Chèvrefeuille has given us an example of his own photoshopped version of this haiku:

autumn has come
visiting my ear on
a pillow of wind

 Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

He says that his aim was to ‘bring more softness, tranquility, into it by changing a small part of this haiku’; he left the first line un-touched and created this version:

autumn has come
whispering into my ear
on a pillow of wind

 Chèvrefeuille

The first challenge for this new feature is create our own ‘Photo-shopped’ versions of Basho’s haiku.