Such a Cold Night

lying down
with quilts over the head
such a cold night                                          Basho
warmth spreads to fingers and toes
outside a frosty moon glows                     Kim M. Russell, 21st January 2020

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Moon over the Mountain Japanese quilt found on Pinterest

My response to Carpe Diem’s Tan Renga Wednesday #10: such a cold night

The middle of the week has come around again with a new episode of Tan Renga Wednesday. The challenge is to create a tan renga with a given haiku by adding the second stanza of two lines (approx. 7-7 syllables):

kazuki fusu futon ya samuki yo ya sugoki

lying down
with quilts over the head
such a cold night

Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

In this haiku, Basho uses rhyme, a lesser known technique as, in (translated) haiku, the use of rhyme isn’t common (according to Western studies). An additional challenge is to make the second stanza a rhyming couplet.

4 thoughts on “Such a Cold Night

  1. I loved snuggling under the blankets as a kid. As an adult, unless it’s super-cold, I never use more than a light blanket because all of my endocrine problems insure that I’m hot all the time.

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