Returning

In thick dark clusters, swallows skim the lake,
reflections on the water shimmer clear.
It seems as if the day will never break;
in thick dark clusters, swallows skim the lake.
I am returning too, to past mistakes
I left behind with sadness, guilt and fear.
In thick dark clusters swallows skim the lake;
reflections on the water shimmer clear.

Kim M. Russell, 27th February 2020

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My response to dVerse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar: Almost a Triolet

Frank is our host this week and the challenge is to write a triolet or a poem that closely resembles a triolet. He has given us the basics:

  • It has 8 lines.
  • The rhyme scheme is abaaabab.
  • The meter is iambic tetrameter.
  • The first, fourth and seventh lines repeat.
  • The second and eighth lines repeat.

66 thoughts on “Returning

  1. The returning to past mistakes made me think of reflection in its contemplative sense, which in turn reflected the reflections of the swallows in the lake. Much more than just a few repeated lines, Kim.

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  2. Gorgeous! 💝 I love the quiet introspective quality of this poem especially; “in thick dark clusters, swallows skim the lake. I am returning too, to past mistakes.”

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  3. Reflections are great storytellers, when we care to look.

    I really love these lines, “I am returning too, to past mistakes / I left behind with sadness, guilt and fear.” Lately, I find myself looking back a lot (not sure why). Perhaps, I’m searching for things I left behind.

    I suspect your poem will stay with me for a while.

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      1. I might not get time to do it, Rajani, as I’m going to stay with my daughter and grandson – it’s his second birthday on Friday.

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  4. …and do the mistakes shimmer clear as well- now that time has passed? I love the swallows skimming above the surface

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