While walking with my dog along the beach,
I found a seashell different from the rest,
a torrent of waves filled with Neptune’s speech.
Spellbound, I contemplated every word
enunciated on the ocean’s breath –
a poem or the cry of a seabird?
Savouring it like salt upon my tongue,
the foam like fishy kisses on my lips,
I opened my mouth and the sea howl sung.
Kim M. Russell, 17th March 2020

My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Three from The Welsh Speaking Sea
This Tuesday, Laura brings us Poetics with the late Raymond Garlick, ‘an English dyed-in-Welsh-wool poet’. I am a fan of Welsh poets but had not read Garlick in depth until now. Thank you, Laura, for reminding me of his word magic and his triplet rhyme scheme.
Laura tells us that Garlick was a synaesthete, who saw letters and words in colour, giving him ‘a multi-layered fascination with words which is evident in a poem he wrote as his young son Iestyn was coming to grips with language’. She has shared with us a poem entitled ‘Welsh-Speaking Sea’, on which she has based today’s prompt.
Our challenge is to choose at least three rhyme word sets, taken from ‘Welsh-Speaking Sea’, and write a poem, which can be three or more three-line stanzas or a composite nine-liner. Laura says that strict meter is not a requirement but for an extra challenge we can try pentameter (10 syllables to each line). We don’t have to follow the sequence of the given word sets and may reverse the order of the first and third words, but we should keep the integrity of each set.
I have chosen SPEECH/REST/BEACH, WORD/BREATH/BIRD and SUNG/LIPS/ TONGUE.
Nice line: “the foam like fishy kisses on my lips,”
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Thank you, Frank.
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I really love how you captured the sound in this, the voice from the shell, and the whole last tercet, howling with the sea gulls.
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Thank you,. Bjorn.
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I like the part about “Neptune’s speech.”
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Thanks!
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Three tidy tercets capturing enough sea lore to fill a novella; excellent poem. The sea theme looms large on the trail tonight. For some reason the prompt words spoke to me of the Great Depression.
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Thanks Glenn. Your Woody Guthrie poem is fitting for the current situation.
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I really enjoyed your take on the prompt, Kim. “A torrent of waves filled with Neptune’s speech…” Brilliant!
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Thank you!
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I enjoyed this
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Thank you kindly!
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My pleasure!
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Kim, I love that first stanza, where you’re walking along and find a seashell different than the rest. Right there I’m hooked. Wonderful imagery.
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Thank you, Jade-Lisa.😊
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‘I found a seashell different from the rest’ really resonates beautifully on the ear & sets the scene for the whole poem – very good use of the rhyme sets Kim
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A shell possessed!
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Thanks Ken!
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“I opened my mouth and the sea howl sung.” How wonderful that line – and your poem – is. Loved it so much.
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“I opened my mouth and the sea howl sung.” How wonderful that line – and your poem – is. Loved it so much.
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Thank you so much, Sherry!
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So evocative. The voices of the sea. (K)
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Thanks Kerfe.
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Oh! so beautiful tohear the song, my it be a soothing one.
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Thank you, Vandana.
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The whole poem just gets better and better – that final stanza! – that last line! just opens the whole thing up, really stunning.
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Thank you, Sarah! How are you surviving? I just had a Face message video chat with daughter and grandson, which cheered me up and then made me cry. WordPress and Facebook are coming into their own.
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Well, I’m really glad I’ve built up an online friendship group. I think we’re going to be relying on each other quite a lot over the next few weeks…months, even.
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you certainly captured our senses in this one Kim … each line resonates, especially “enunciated on the ocean’s breath”
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Thank you, Kate!
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Good one, Kim. The word choices made the sea inevitable somewhere, but you gave it full rein. Love the howl 🙂
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Thank you, Jane! It’s only Wednesday and I already feel like howling. 😊
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Keep calm, Kim, it’s only just starting, and it’s going to get a lot stricter. They’ve increased the fine for being caught outside without a written permit. Must mean that people weren’t taking it seriously enough yesterday.
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The schools are starting to close over here.
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What about herd immunity?
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They seem to have forgotten that and BJ has just said they’ve been implementing ‘the right measures at the right time’.
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Oh, that’s okay then. Everybody trusts him implicitly, don’t they?
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I think many people are regretting voting for the Tories.
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What’s changed?
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They’re fed up with all the contradictory and confusing decisions and advice.
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I just can’t understand what gave people the impression they would be anything but contradictory and confusing. If I could work that out, I might be able to see why they are disillusioned now.
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You photo so beautifully illustrates that last stanza .. or vice versa…whichever, I love it!
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Thank you, Bev!
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Beautiful words Kim, and this has such a lovely flow to it. Lulling, like the waves.
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Thank you, Linda.
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