his poem a bottle blue glass glittering in the sand washed up on sea swell salt and power ebb and crash on a distant beach buried in sediment until a girl’s bare foot stumbled upon a jewel hidden well among stones and shells its tattered label washed by the tide the message inside cryptic and secret spelled out his name Kim M. Russell, 13th April 2023
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This Thursday at the dVerse Poets Pub, Sanaa invites us to Meet the Bar with line messaging, a new poetry form created by Angel Favazza, in which there is no fixed meter, syllable count or rhyme scheme, except that the last line of each stanza (when read separately from the poem) should deliver an independent message or be a poem all on its own.
Sanna has provided an example by Angel Favazza. She says we can be philosophical, somber or serious, show our playful side or even better, be romantic!
I do like your poem, Kim, much better than the example!
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Thank you Jane!
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I so adore a shape poem! 😍 This one cascades gorgeously with its last lines speaking volumes. Thank you so much for writing to the prompt, Kim! 💖💖
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I’m so glad you like it, Sanaa!
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And now I want to listen to The Police, singing “Message in a Bottle”. Love the shape and the melancholy of that name as well as your embedded message.
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Thanks Björn. I should have added a link to the song!
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Just for you… https://www.google.com/search?q=message+in+a+bottle&sxsrf=APwXEddBuFJ487Qs3kkGTf205FEDQkdugA%3A1681414359999&ei=11g4ZKPKPIKEgAbzo4HwCA&gs_ssp=eJzj4tFP1zcsNM3IKyrLLTRg9BLOTS0uTkxPVcjMU0hUSMovKclJBQDPJgvk&oq=Message+in+a+bottle&gs_lcp=Cgxnd3Mtd2l6LXNlcnAQARgAMgsILhDUAhCABBDqBDIFCAAQgAQyBQgAEIAEMgUIABCABDILCC4QgAQQxwEQrwEyBQgAEIAEMggILhCABBDUAjIFCC4QgAQyBQgAEIAEMgUIABCABDIWCC4Q1AIQgAQQ6gQQ3AQQ3QQQ4AQYAToECCMQJzoICC4QigUQkQI6CwgAEIAEELEDEIMBOhEILhCDARDHARCxAxDRAxCABDoOCC4QigUQsQMQgwEQ1AI6EQguEIAEELEDEIMBEMcBENEDOgkIIxAnEEYQ-QE6CQgAEIoFEAoQQzoHCAAQigUQQzoICAAQigUQkQI6CgguEIoFENQCEEM6CgguEBQQhwIQgAQ6CwguEIoFENQCEJECOg0IABCKBRCxAxCDARBDOgoIABCKBRCxAxBDOgoILhCKBRCxAxBDOggIABCABBCxAzoNCAAQgAQQsQMQgwEQCjoHCAAQgAQQCjoKCAAQgAQQsQMQCjoOCC4Q1AIQigUQkQIQ6gQ6DQguEIAEEMcBEK8BEAo6GQguENQCEIoFEJECEOoEENwEEN4EEOAEGAE6BwgAEIAEEA06CgguEIAEEA0Q1AI6CggAEIAEEA0QsQM6BwguEIAEEA06DQgAEIAEEA0QsQMQgwE6CgguEA0QgAQQ6gQ6CQgAEA0QgAQQCjoNCAAQDRCABBCxAxCxAzoNCAAQDRCABBCxAxCDAToHCAAQDRCABDoVCC4QDRCABBDqBBDcBBDeBBDgBBgBOhUILhANEIAEEOoEENwEEN0EEOAEGAE6CwguEIAEEMcBENEDOhkILhDUAhCKBRCRAhDqBBDcBBDdBBDgBBgBOhYILhDUAhCABBDqBBDcBBDeBBDgBBgBSgQIQRgAUABY3YABYLWrAWgKcAF4AoAB6AOIAdI3kgEKNy4xMS4yLjYuNZgBAKABAcABAdoBBggBEAEYFA&sclient=gws-wiz-serp
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Your message comes through loud and clear with such vibrant imagery.
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Thank you Suzanne!
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Oh this is exquisite Kim. Its as if everything was where it was supposed to be and gave birth to your second poem. Beautifully written ☺️💕
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Thanks so much Christine!
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Very nicely done, Kim. Love the stone shells spelling out his name.
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Cheers Dwight!
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Loving the beautiful flow of this piece! ❤
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Thank you Layla!
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The desperation of trying to send a love letter in a bottle…
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So true!
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Loving both the poems ☺️ message in a bottle is a rare find ❤️
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Thank you Aboli!
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