The gardener was digging in the walled garden when Louisa passed through the gate, tracing with her fingers its intricate metal work, oak leaves studded with acorns. The autumn sun was on his back and his muscles bulged in rolled-up shirt sleeves.
She thought, ‘To be pretty for you I have dropped two seeds of turnsole in the dark of both eyes’. Indeed, she had picked a handful of Indian heliotrope to place in a jar of water, a subject for her latest still life. The blue flowers were the colour of his eyes.
‘It’s a fine morning for digging,’ she said. ‘Has the robin visited yet?’
‘Aye, that he has.’
He was a man of few words, focused on his work. He nodded in acknowledgement. Louisa was disappointed but tenacious. For now, she was content with dreaming of those arms around her waist.
Kim M. Russell, 11th September 2023

Image by Ghulam Khairul Bashar on Unsplash
It’s Monday, we’re at the dVerse Poets Pub, and we’re dabbling in Prosery with Sanaa, American poet Isabel Duarte Gray and a line from her poem ‘Garden’: “To be pretty for you I have dropped two seeds of turnsole in the dark of both eyes.”
This is the line we must include in a piece of prose of 144 words, in which we may change the punctuation but may not insert words anywhere in the given line.
This feels like a scene from Lady Chatterley’s lover (or twin book). Very romantic.
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Not my usual style, but I went with the flow and that’s what happened!
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I absolutely love love this! Especially; “Indeed, she had picked a handful of Indian heliotrope to place in a jar of water, a subject for her latest still life. The blue flowers were the colour of his eyes.” Sigh … thank you so much for writing to the prompt! ❤️❤️❤️
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment, Sanaa, and for the prompt line.
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And thank you for using it so beautifully! 🥰🥰
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I don’t know how to get emojis on my laptop, so xoxo
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xoxoxoxo
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Oh my….you’ve sucombed to the romanticism of Sanaa! Love it! 🙂
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I have! Thank you, Lill!
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Beautifully done, Kim! I like this Lady Chatterly-like tale. Somehow though, I feel a sense of darkness though. I don’t think any good is going to come of this. 🙂
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Thank you, Merril. I had a friend who fell for the guy who helped with her garden and it didn’t end well.
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You’re welcome.
Perhaps I sensed that about your friend.
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Nice one Kim.
Happy Monday
Much🖤love
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Thank you, Gillena, and much love to you!
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Wonderful write, Kim!
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Thank you, Lynn!
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The ending made me smile. A wonderfully warm garden scene, beautifully written.
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Thank you, Miriam.
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Simmering passions. I imagine he looks like Fabio 🙂
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Thanks Lisa, but who is Fabio? I was thinking more of Oliver Mellors. 🙂
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Ooh! Just looked him up. He’ll do 🙂 Here is a link to Fabio (from before, not sure what he looks like now)

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You leave us wanting more of this interesting potential love story. Well done, Kim.
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Thank you, Dwight!
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You are welcome.
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Aye, sounds like a nice dream. 🙂
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But what if one of them is a predator? 🙂
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Hmmm not so good…always better to dream!
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There’s nothing quite like a bit of possible romance! Dreams are free as the saying goes.
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All true!
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Indeed an unusual offering from you. Hope the gardener had more sense than the protagonist did.
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Thanks! I had a Lady Chatterley situation in mind.
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Her poetic romantic thoughts will hopefully bear fruit. ❤
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Thank you, Susan!
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This reminded me of The Secret Garden.
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I was hoping more for Lady Chatterley!
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It was the combination of walled garden, the gardener and the robin. As a story, I prefer The Secret Garden anyway 🙂
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I do too! It’s one of my favourites from childhood. I loved the Yorkshire dialect scattered through the book, Dickon and the robin. I wanted to be Mary Maddox, but only in Yorkshire.
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She made a good job of the Yorkshire speech. It’s a lovely story.
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Very sexy, Kim! I really enjoyed this piece of yours! ❤
Much love,
David
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Thanks so much, David!
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Such a perfectly resolved piece of fiction here. Love how you used the prompt line to show us her calculating mind at work! Gave me Lady Chatterley vibes 🙂
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Thank you, Sunra!
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Oooh err Kim! Full on Lady Chatterley – whatever were you thinking of? no don’t answer that I think it’s pretty clear lol
Most enjoyable…
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🙂
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I love the flowers being the colour of his eyes – and the challenge of trying to win the attention of someone so indifferent. Wonderfully done!
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I love the flowers being the colour of his eyes – and the challenge of trying to win the attention of someone so indifferent. Wonderfully done!
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Thank you, Sherry. I’m not sure that I’d be up for that kind of challenge, not at my age. 🙂
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Ahou, the gardener cometh. You fit the prompt line is sooo very well. Mine was an afterthought, I had written with a wrong line and had to change, even delete a few words to make it make the grade.
Oh yes, we have a Muscovy duck that visits our front yard every morning, around ten. The lawn is shaded and then in the afternoon she goes across he street where the shade has gone. At night she has a nest, with some eggs above the neighbor’s garage, in an upstairs window box.
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I love it when birds visit, Jim, and that you are visited by a Muscovy duck. We have robins that visit, once a swan, and magpies come regularly. And, of course, owls.
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I hope her dreams come true! (K)
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🙂
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Ooooh, but (in the light of recent exchanges) Iam more interested in the intricate Oak and the acorns on that sensuously fingered gate! These Quercus pop up everywhere…
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They do!
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