Vernal Rebirth

We’re surrounded by the dead and dying,
tangled and defying, branch and tree

like giant corpses nourish everything.
Even sleeping trees can conjure growth

into green froth of luminosity
in village, city, copse and forest.

From lifeless days under leaden skies, we
watch sleeping trees slowly conjure spring.

Kim M. Russell, 25th January, 2024

Over at the dVerse Poets Pub, this Thursday’s Meeting the Bar is hosted by Merril with the Toddaid, a Welsh poetic form that can be seen as quatrains and couplets.

She has given us an explanation from Writer’s Digest. However, I like Jane Dougherty’s explanation, in which the structure is couplets, with line one having ten syllables, line two having nine, and the main rhyme, which can be assonance or consonance, is in the middle of line one and at the end of line two, with an echo rhyme at the end of lie one and in the middle of line two.

Merril suggests starting with one couplet, a ten-syllable first line and then a nine-syllable line, to be aware of sound–assonance and consonance, and make sure main rhyme is the end of the line with the middle of the next line, while the lines end with almost-rhymes of assonance or consonance. She would like us to write at least 2 couplets.

33 thoughts on “Vernal Rebirth”

  6. Oh my, I went for rebirth too…only with waterlilies. Although not as deftly done as your poem. I love…
    into green froth of luminosity
    in village, city, copse and forest.

    It has a wave of coolness that is very inviting for me! Lovely. 🙂

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