In a single hour
of August moonrise,
she steals all of me,
lured by her silver glow.
Time seems to stand still;
I bask in her light show,
and the deeper I dive,
succumb to her moonbow.
I can’t mourn the theft
of my inner soul;
moon, take all of me,
I’ll treasure what is left.
I stand in moonlight,
baptised, not bereft.
Unabashed, I know,
I stand naked in the afterglow.
Kim M. Russell, 8th August 2024

Image by Meca Jane Tabada on Unsplash
It’s Thursday and time to meet the bar at the dVerse Poets Pub, with Laura, our host, and an Octameter for August and Sara Teasdale.
Laura reminds us that we are in the eighth month and today is the birthday of the poet Sara Teasdale, who was born in 1884. She has shared an extract from Teasdale’s poem ‘August Moonrise’. She tells us that ‘love, life, beauty and death are the hallmarks of much of Teasdale’s poetry which is unsurprising given that she lived through wartime as a young woman’. She also shares another extract, this time from a two-octet poem, ‘The Answer’.
Our challenge is to write an Octameter, designed by Shelley A. Cephas in 2007, which has sixteen lines – two stanzas of eight lines each – and five syllables per line. The rhyme scheme is a/b/c/d/e/d/f/d; g/h/c/g/i/g/d/d. Laura says to watch out for those repeat rhymes and where they fall; 2 in the first stanza and 3 in the second stanza. There is no set theme but we may write in the style of Sara Teasdale or dedicate a poem to her, with or without epigraph.
It’s my birthday on Saturday, so I’ll stick with ‘August Moonrise’ and take inspiration and my title from these lines:
“Let this single hour atone
For the theft of all of me.”
you made the Octameter into a lovely ode to the moon that reads so smoothly which is not easy.
The 2nd stanza especially a standout
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Thank you very much, Laura!
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Not easy indeed…
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I love your surrender here and those lines you chose from Teasdale’s poem. I love your line:
I stand in moonlight,
baptised,
You turn your experience to embracing the sacred here ❤
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Thank you, Lisa. I was glad of being able to choose lines from the Teasdale poem; it’s always difficult to write a poem to form without a theme or topic.
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You’re welcome, Kim. And oh yes, I can relate to that poeming difficulty with this year’s POPO. In other years I’ve done ekphrastic but this year have gone in with thought bubbles lol
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Nice one!!!
much♡love
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Thanks Gillena, and much love to you!
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Wonderfully written, Kim.. You captured her style very well!
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Thank you, Dwight.
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Yes indeed, Kim, sweet surrender…
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Thank you, Andrew.
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So beautiful, Kim! How could you not “succumb to moonbow?” 💙
I think you were wise not to stick to 5 syllables per line.
Happy Birthday in advance!
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Thank you very much, Merril! ❤
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You’re welcome, Kim! 💙
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Lovely sentiments about the moons alluring pull. May your birthday on Saturday lift your spirits and be amazing. Happy Birthday to You!
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Thank you very much, Truedessa.
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Makes me want to go skinny dipping!😆
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That’s one thing I’ve never done!
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There’s a first time for everything!
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This is so gently mystical, especially the last lines.
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Thank you, Jane!
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Happy Birthday Kim for Saturday, how lovely to “succumb to her moonbow”
💞Suzanne
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Thank you very much, Suzanne!
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Such an evocative poem in ‘octameter,’ Kim! You do a wonderful job, in my view, at finessing the strange circularity of the rhymes with the shuttling between the moon and your persona’s “inner soul”—that seems to be the form’s own potential.
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Thank you so much, Chris!
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A delightful poem, Kim. I found this form quite challenging and yours flows so well.
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Thank you, Robbie.
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My pleasure
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“I bask in her light show,
and the deeper I dive,
succumb to her moonbow”
Gorgeous, Kim!
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Thanks very much, Sara!
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