Reflections on a Train

I know that I wrote in a previous post that I was down to writing one poem a day, but I couldn’t resist responding to dVerse Poets’ Haibun Monday #6

This is the last post of the day – honestly!

Reflections on a Train

I love train journeys and make regular trips between Norwich and London, as well as to Cardiff. I have spent many a trip gazing out at rain-drenched scenery, mesmerised by the watery colours, looking for smoke rising from chimneys and the odd sad-looking horse in its dripping coat, usually hugging a hedge. I love the colours of the countryside in rain and the way the inside of the carriage is reflected from the darkness of the window.

Raindrop refraction

Or a pointillist landscape

Of bare bones of trees?

 

I know that this is a supposed to be a haibun but I couldn’t stop myself from developing it into  a poem:

 

Staring at a zoetrope

Of scenery,

Am I passing it

Or is it passing me?

Raindrop refraction

Or a pointillist landscape

Of bare bones of trees?

Murky greys and greens

Merge

Into a single blur

And the metronome

Of train

And rain

Melds me to its rhythm

Until all I see

Is a reflection of me.

 

© Kim M. Russell, 2016

28 thoughts on “Reflections on a Train”

    1. Thank you so much. Haiku and tanka I have posted on the blog are often the seeds that germinate into bigger poems that I send in to competitions. The problem is, most competitions require poems to be unpublished, even on a blog. But I really appreciate comments from fellow bloggers – competitions never tell you why you have failed or where you have succeeded.

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      1. You are welcome, and I know what you are saying. I never get to send poetry to competitions because I post everything I write :)… we need constructive criticism in order to grow as writers – I wish more people were truly open to it but I have found (the hard way) on several occasions, that many are not. I love your poetry – no matter where it takes you 🙂

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