A Seaside Octain

My response to dVerse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar – Octain Refrain

 

In lines of salty poetry

beach-combings of sea-shells and stones

seaweed and brittle brine-bleached bones

 

polished and arranged in glory

deep blues and moody seascape hues

the writer navigates a story

 

of washing waves and seagull’s tones

in lines of salty poetry

 

© Kim M. Russell, 2016

Crumbling Cliff and Beach

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31 thoughts on “A Seaside Octain

  1. This is beautiful and peaceful. I love that your internal rhyme line — “deep blues and moody seascape hues” — was a little unbalanced with blues not being in the center. I also love your alliteration throughout.

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  2. You really shine with this form, Kim; this is one of the best poems I’ve encountered out here today. My wife & I are spending 2 days mid-week at the ocean soon; love those negative ions.

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