My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics – The Music in You – in which Mish has challenged us to write our own songs.
I took my salty tears
And gave them to the sea
When the evening tide turned
It brought them back to me
The ocean cried
The ocean wailed
The day we said goodbye
The day your ship sailed
I took my salty tears
And dried them in the sun
But they trickled through my hands
Turned to sand, one by one
The ocean cried
The ocean wailed
The day we said goodbye
The day your ship sailed
I took my salty tears
And cried them in a dream
Of you in distant olive groves
Shady, cool and green
The ocean cried
The ocean wailed
The day we said goodbye
The day your ship sailed
I took my salty tears
To groves of lemon trees
Where sunshine fell like feathers
On a citrus scented breeze
The ocean cried
The ocean wailed
The day we said goodbye
The day your ship sailed
I took my salty tears
Down to the cemetery
The ship returned without you
Our love’s just a memory
The ocean cried
The ocean wailed
When we said goodbye
The day your ship sailed
© Kim M. Russell, 2016
Graziella by Jules Jospeh Lefebvre – image found on commons.wikimedia.org
writing in north norfolk 
I think this is wonderful. I like the imagery you’ve used without making it too dense or wordy for singing and the repetition of the salty tears.
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Thank you so much, Mish 😊
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A melancholy song Kim and I love your refrain of:
The ocean cried
The ocean wailed
When we said goodbye
The day your ship sailed
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Thank you, Grace 🙂
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I could hear the music in this! I think we should get Nickl Creek to sing your beautiful lament. Well done, like everything else you write 🙂
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Thank you, Jilly! I hate to appear ignorant, but who is Nicky Creek?
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Nickel Creek is a band. Not sure if you can get this Youtube video – the connections don’t always cross the pond. https://youtu.be/_nneEIX59I8
Or just Google Nickel Creek ‘This Side’
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After listening to a few tracks on YouTube, I think I’ll follow them on Spotify. They’re kind of folky. Thanks for the suggestion. 😊
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🙂 Been listening to them all morning while I work.
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Oh, I just love this ocean inspired song!
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I’m delighted it hit the spot!
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The theme of a sailor’s wife is so strong, so it’s close to mythology… I truly love your take on this…the refrain is perfect-
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Thanks, Bjorn 😊
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Salty tears and ships – I love the way you have put this sad song together. I’d like to hear it sung.
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Thank you Viv! I wonder if any of the dVerse poets are also good at writing music.
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Can’t without the piano for tryouts.
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Beautifully done Kim 😀
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Thank you, Sanaa 😁
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A wonderful song…I love the salty tears.
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Thank you 🙂
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I love the contrast of the repetition of the salty tears with the change of the scene. Lovely poem.
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Thank you 🙂
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Love the art you’ve chosen….and love every word of this sweet sweet song.
And most especially
“I took my salty tears
To groves of lemon trees
Where sunshine fell like feathers
On a citrus scented breeze”
I truly believe this should be a song — sung in a hazey club…and people would be misty eyed.
Well done!
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I’m delighted you like it, Lillian. 😊
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i’LL take this
in another direction
of the story of the
lonely sailors wife..
boots outside
often
indicated
a visitor..
a shipmate
to sAdly take
tHeir pLace..
hmm..
for
some Love
liVes Stronger
aWay.. for otHeRs
Love liVes none
a stray..
hmm..
memories
juST memories
tHat iS aLL to lEarn
aNew of HuMan
NatUre dArk
and
LiGht..:)
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Ah, romantic betrayal 🙂
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