The garden’s gaunt with February grey,
even the grass is dirty
this early morning Sunday
and the clouds above are murky,
drifting ragged ghosts
or a witchy hurly burly
racing towards the coast.
One sudden ray of sun
distracts them from their post;
light-fingered clouds gather as one,
purloin the golden coin and run.
Kim M. Russell, 2018
My response to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Fussy Little Forms: Terza Rima also linked to Poets United Poetry Pantry
For our little form challenge today, Marian wants us to invoke the rule of three in a form that allows for poems that are short or longer–the terza rrima. She has shared wonderful examples by Robert Frost and Adrienne Rich to inspire us.
writing in north norfolk 
kaykuala
racing towards the coast.
One sudden ray of sun
distracts them from their post;
They race to the shore to bring on the downpour. The sun is a spoiler and there goes the rain! Like the sequential process Kim!
Hank
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The clouds relinquished the sun again, but for how long I don’t know, Hank!
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Humanising nature always makes the grim times better. Sometimes we wish someone would purloin the sun here in Australia as it cooks us in a pot!
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I’ll send you over some clouds, Robin!
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What a delectable fantasy! And I like your clever half-rhymes.
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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Such a gorgeous painting that is! 😀 And this “light-fingered clouds gather as one, purloin the golden coin and run”.. left me absolutely breathless!💞
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Thank you, Sanaa!
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I love the form and what you did with it. Beautiful imagery, and like Rosemary I enjoyed the ‘half-rhymes.’
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Thank you, Mary.
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This is so complete a picture. Terza rima lends itself to lyrical description.
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Thank you, Kerry. I think I’ll return to terza rima.
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I love “drifting ragged ghosts of a witchy hurly burly.” Image and poem compliment each other.
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Thank you, Sherry.
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I can see the scene with the rays of sun battling clouds… really very atmospheric and I can feel the personality of the clouds.
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I can see them through our window, and the sun is shining through the rain. There must be a rainbow somewhere!
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Ah, the hurly-burly. Somehow that is totally apt in this pretty poem. Feels a bit like this around here this weekend, though the clouds and rain are winning.
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It’s been like that here all day and now, at nearly four in the afternoon, we have sun and rain all at once!
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This is a metrical joy to read and the rhyme buttons wonderfully.
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Thank you so much, Brendan.
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What a fabulous poem…..you have done a remarkable job with the imagery! I really love this!!
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Thank you kindly, Donna!
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Beautiful poem. It’s been raining her and the sky is winter grey. I can connect to this.
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…raining here…!
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We’ve had all kinds of weather today and I’m pleased to say we have the most impressive sunset at the moment.
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This creates such distinct images. I really enjoyed it.
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Thank you!
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Awesome (as usual) !
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Lovely! (my likes aren’t sticking today so may not show)
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Groovy scenes.. 😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀
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Thanks Dorna!
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Oh, I just love this–beautiful imagery!
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Thank you!
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“One sudden ray of sun
distracts them from their post..” only you, can up with such original lines. These clouds have attitude and character….the picture’s perfect!
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Thank you, Viv!
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“purloin the golden coin” Same here. Those crafty cloud. I’m so tired of February grey and dirty grass!
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Visual and nuanced metaphors … brilliant metaphors. Beautiful writing!
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Thank you, Wendy!
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“the clouds above are murky,
drifting ragged ghosts”
How beautiful!
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Thank you so much!
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You did a beautiful job with this firm. Your rhymes are magnificent and the imagery is amazing.
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Thank you, Toni!
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Oh this is so beautiful. What a vivid picture you paint with words.
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Thank you, Myrna!
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Just delicious! Descriptive and sets the scene so wonderfully! Loved it.
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Thank you, Margaret!
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Very nice on the cloud behavior. Sorry they were naughty. Ours seemed that way also.
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Thank you, Jim. The sky’s a little clearer today 🙂
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Those last two lines are *delicious*… Wonderful stuff!
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Thank you!
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This form is such a cool prompt. Maybe I need to visit that site and see what’s up. Love what you did with this!
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Thank you, Sue!
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Such a poetic description of clouds. I have been mumble grumbling about the clouds we have had lately, not in a poetic way. 🙂 Love this!
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Thank you, Susie, I’m delighted you like it. 🙂
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