a naked landscape
of icy geometry
black branches against grey sky
swirling skirts of mist
sharp scent of snow-covered pines
words float in white clouds of breath

riotous colour
the ripening of cornfields
splash of yellow sunflowers
bees humming mantras
from honeysuckle to rose
blessing the summer garden

Kim M. Russell, 2018
My response to Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #21 Out Of The Box #3 Chōka and Sedōka (Winter / Summer) also linked to Poets United Poetry Pantry
For the meditation this weekend, Chèvrefeuille has chosen another ‘Out Of The Box’ and challenges us to create a winter poem and a summer poem, using the chōka or the sedōka form.
He explains that the chōka, ‘long poem’, is of indefinite length, formed of alternating lines of five and seven syllables, ending with an extra seven-syllable line; the shortest that exist have 7 lines long while the longest have 150. The sedōka, or ‘head-repeated poem’, consists of two tercets of five, seven, and seven syllables each. An uncommon form, it was sometimes used for dialogues. Chōka and sedōka were seldom written after the 8th century.
That conversation in clouds really marks winter i think
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🙂
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Soo incredibly stunning, Kim!💖 Especially love “words float in white clouds of breath.” 😍
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Thank you, Sanaa! 🙂
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Wow! Excellent.
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Thank you!
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“swirling skirts of mist
sharp scent of snow-covered pines”
loved it…. and the words go so well with the image !
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Thank you, Neeraj!
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Love the form, love the imagery and love the fabulous contrasts of the beauty in each season!
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Thank you kindly, Donna!
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Excellent series of seasonal Marvelous-ness.. 😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀
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Thank you, Dorna!
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A stunning piece of writing … mesmerizing … brilliantly constructed.
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Thank you, Wendy.
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I love the image of words floating in white clouds of breath.
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Thank you, Sherry!
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Well done, Kim.
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Thank you, Ken!
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Luv the imagery you ascribed to the mist. A nice lot
Happy you dropped in at my Sunday Standard this week
Much💖love
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Thanks Gillena! Love and best wishes for a great week 💟
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I really love the contrasts between your two poems. I personally am anxious to see those sunflowers!
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Me too!
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From the swirling skirts of mists and bees humming mantras, you can surely turn a phrase.
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Thank you, Colleen.
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icy geometry.. love that!
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Thank you, Rajani!
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Beautiful phrases make winter and summer come alive!
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Thanks Bev!
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Two nicely crafted sedoka Kim. Your winter sedoka is really awesome.
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Thank you so much, Kristjaan!
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Two beautiful sedokas!
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Thank you, Janice!
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A lovely contrast.
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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I love ‘swirling skirts of mist’ – you set a perfect winter table!
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Thank you, Sara!
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Reblogged this on SEO.
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Thank you!
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