is painted in pointillist shadows,
light fades with the last echoes
of birdsong and clings to moon
and stars. Lingering day, when owls
skim, swoop, dodge in and out
of branches not yet embellished
with blossom or leaves
but pregnant with promise.
Kim M. Russell, 29th April 2018
My response to The Poetry School NaPoWriMo prompt for Day 29: Amnesty Day, also linked to Poets United Poetry Pantry
Ali says that today, the penultimate day of NaPoWriMo, is amnesty day. It’s a day to do any or all of the following things:
- Go back and try some prompts we missed or want another go at. We should post a reminder of the prompts with our poems.
- Repost any poems we feel didn’t get enough – or indeed any – feedback.
- Post poems we’ve written this month that didn’t come from a prompt, but we’d still like feedback on.
- Edit or redraft poems from previous prompts and post the new, improved versions for feedback.
I’m short of time so I reworked a haibun I wrote during NaPoWriMo. I decided to forget the haiku and turned the whole thing into an octet.
writing in north norfolk 
Beautifully described, as always.
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Thank you, Rosemary.
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I love pointilism.
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What delightful observation, we are very lucky as poets to write what we see and feel and bring sense to words in other readers. Beautifully written.
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Thank you, Robin!
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I love thinking of this day as being pregnant with promise. Really expresses the reality of April & the way each day is promised something even better ahead.
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Thank you, Mary.
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This is absolutely stunning both in words and image, Kim!💞 I love “pointillist shadows.” 🙂
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The pointillist shadows makes me see those tiny leaves of spring… really I just have to look out of the window and it’s there.
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🙂
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I love “pregnant with promise,” that is where I like to stand, where everything is possible.
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Thank you, Annell!
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Love the poem and form…..and could visualize this day, especially the ‘pregnant with promise’ part as I see it all around!
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Thank you for reading and for your kind comments, Donna!
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My favourite time of day, so beautifully described. I love the birds swooping around.
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Thank you, Sherry!
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Love the progression, Kim. How your poem starts us at the end, tells about us what created the whole, and then shows us what looks like… and what it can/will become. I can see the blooms bursting out of that promise. It’s a yummy sight.
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Thank you, Magaly. As you probably gathered, early morning/evening twilight is my favourite time.
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I love the images! Beautifully penned.
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Thank you, Ayala!
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Excellent! After I looked up “pointilism” 🙂
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🙂
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I read this several times . . . Gorgeous!
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Thank you, Mama Zen!
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This is a beautiful piece. It’s that time of day here, so I’m looking from screen to window as I read. Thanks for such a lovely read.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
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kaykuala
but pregnant with promise.
A lingering day can end up with a lot of unexpected happenings. Very true Kim as time is at its disposal!
Hank
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Thanks Hank!
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You did well with this octet. I love the imagery of the fading light and owls dodging through branches.
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Thank you, Viv. My favourite time day!
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🙂
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Looked up pointillism … fascinating!
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I love the way pointillist artists capture light. Have you seen Venice Twilight by Claude Monet?
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Yes, absolutely brilliant!
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Awesome. 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Thank you kindly, Dorna! 🙂
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