These curtains so accurately drawn
in water on my windowpane
remind me of briny tears, the way they ran
in perfect vertical lines down the misty windscreen
with the broken windscreen wiper
that day on the storm tossed seafront.
Even the urchin seagulls hugged the gritty beach.
Who knew that distance could hurt so much?
Kim M. Russell, 25th April 2019
My response to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Poems in April Day 25 Kerry Says: Let’s Be Imagists!
Today Kerry has shared photos by Kenia Santos, a video clip of artwork by Wuru-Natasha Ogunji, and some advice from Carl Jung: “The point is you start with any image…”
Kerry would like us to choose an image, remember the key points of simplicity, clarity and precision. And write a poem that, according to T.E. Hulme, is based on an absolutely accurate presentation of the subject, with no excess verbiage. An excellent prompt for a 55.
Your poem reminds me of times I drove to Frankston Beach, sat in my car facing the ocean, and wept, even as the sky wept.
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I hope it hasn’t made you sad for the rest of the day.
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This is such an elegant poem and description of the featured artwork, Kim! ❤️ I love how you compare to “briny tears, the way they ran in perfect vertical lines down the misty windscreen with the broken windscreen wiper.” 😀
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Thank you, dear Sanaa. 😊
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Exactly what the imagism impetus demands. Well done!
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Cheers Ron!
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There is a thing about water trickling down window panes that remind us of our loved ones. Wonderful poem
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Thank you, Namy.
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Wonderful!
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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“Who knew that distance could hurt so much?” Wonderful, Kim
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Thank you, Debi. 😊
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Lovely poem. Reminds me if days I walked in the rain on the beach.
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Thanks Toni!
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Wow! Kim, this poem has blown me away.. the emotional undertones are perfectly balanced with the rainy scene. What an amazing rendition of the art itself.
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I’m blushing like a tomato, Kerry! Thank you so much for your kind words; you’ve made my day. 😊
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You’ve beautifully and masterfully captured the image and the prompt.
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Thank you so much, Susie.
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So well done Kim. Simple yet complex with its poignancy.
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Thank you, Linda!
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The tears and those parallel lines of line… a wonderful and sad image…. melancholia is rain.
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Thanks Bjorn.
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I was left with great pangs of longing.. Wonderful write.
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Thank you, Violet!
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