Beachcombing

missing the malls
on the ocean beach
she gathers shells
                                                        salty gems in her pockets
­                                                        sand under her fingernails
afternoon wind
all the beachcomber’s words
blown out to sea
­                                                        surfing back on white-capped waves
­                                                        with the voice of a seagull
cold beach walk
on sun-warmed car seats
two sweatshirts
­                                                        lingering scent of the sea
­                                                        entangled in windswept hair                            
high tide
the beach leaves a mark
in her book
­                                                        lonely mermaid’s fingerprint
­                                                        a reminder of the day
a special beach
I put a pebble in my mouth
before leaving
­                                                        it grazes my probing tongue
­                                                        with the force of the ocean
smelling the light
on her tanned shoulder
home from the beach
­                                                        tipsy from the sun’s kisses
­                                                        and the rock and roll of waves

Jane Reichhold                               Kim M. Russell, 17th July 2019

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‘A Mermaid’ 1901 by John William Waterhouse (1849-1917) – image found on pixels.com

My response to Carpe Diem #1704 Beachcomber … Renga With Jane Reichhold

In today’s episode ‘Summer Love’ we have a prompt taken from Jane Reichhold’s Dictionary Of Haiku, a modern saijiki, from the section Summer, subsection livelihood: Beachcomber. Our task is to create a Renga With Jane Reichhold using the given haiku.

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9 thoughts on “Beachcombing

  1. I like how you’ve played with the elements in this Kim – it brings the essence of sea, salt and ocean to life – and I particularly liked these lines –

    surfing back on white-capped waves
    with the voice of a seagull

    it grazes my probing tongue
    with the force of the ocean

    – for me, they add a lovely compliment to the haiku – ‘answering’ with elements that awaken my senses and leave me wondering (in the best of ways) … for what I might “hear” and “taste” …

    a lovely work Kim – fresh for it. 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much, Pat. When I first looked at the selection of haiku, I wasn’t sure where to start. Getting them into some kind of order usually helps, but I had to do a lot of juggling before the muse took over.😊

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      1. I can understand – especially since these were so close to what we did not too long ago — so I too sat and had to wonder where to begin; in the end, I went with another form altogether, just because I found myself repeating myself otherwise 😉

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