Suspended on the air,
the tang of dead leaves,
breath of wood smoke,
tingle of frost
and echoes in twilight.
A full moon, pearly white
touches reflections
splintering the night,
tinged with bright
Christmas lights.
Twinkling headlights,
streetlight’s glow,
and intimate lamp-lit windows
remind us that now
it’s time to go home.
In the darkening gloam
where berries glisten,
as we walk, we listen
for sleigh bells’ echo
and sniff the air for snow.
Kim M. Russell, 10th December 2019

My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Echo… echo… echo
Merril is looking after the bar today and she wants us to echo, echo, echo.
The example poems she has shared are ‘Echo’ by Christina Rossetti, which is about memories echoing and includes repeated words that echo throughout the poem, and ‘Echo’ by John Poch, a villanelle that retells the myth of Echo and Narcissus and uses repetition to form a sort of echo.
Merril would like us to write something about echoes. We can write actual echo poetry—where you repeat the end word or syllable or echo sounds – or write a poem about some sort of actual echoes – or write about the myth of Echo – or combine any or all of these.
I chose to rework a poem I posted in December 2019.
I really feel this … Christmas is like an echo of the past I think… each little image is overlayed on every Christmas past…
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I think you’re right, Bjorn!
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Oh, I can almost smell that delicious air! This is gorgeous Kim.
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Thank you, Linda!
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I like the way you have used words that almost repeat one another like tingle and tinkle. It’s slightly off-beat like an almost rhyme and it made me listen.
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Thank you, Jane.
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🙂
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This is really lovely–I think such memories echo. Reading it, I felt like I was in this memory of Christmas.
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Thank you Merril – my favourite comment: ‘I felt I was in the memory of Christmas’.
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You’re welcome. 🙂
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Excellent use of echo ersatz, stirred into a Christmas song. Nice sense of place; touches an old humbug like me, which is not easy to do.
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Thank you, Glenn!
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I love the rhythm of your poem, your rhymes, and your use of enjambment.
Favorite part:
“A full moon, pearly white
touches reflections
splintering the night,
tinged with bright
Christmas lights.”
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Thank you, Jade.
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YW
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Awesome piece and flow smoothly. Thanks much for sharing
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Oooh I love this! A very Merry Christmas to you!
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Thank you so much! Merry Christmas to you,, and a happy new year!
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Living in southern climes, our Christmas is so different – blue skies, sunshine, cherries and warm days. But I have lived in Europe and the UK and had Christmas in Canada and the US so know your season well.
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Thank you Roslyn. You have cherries? I love them!
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Really lovely and heart warming!
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Thank you, Kate!
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my pleasure Kim
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Nostalgic, warm, authentic echoes of Christmases past artfully written, Kim!
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Thank you, Lynn!
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kaykuala
as we walk, we listen
for sleigh bells’ echo
and sniff the air for snow.
The anticipation for Christmas can be testing for those too impatient to wait for . It is quite normal though!
Hank
Hank
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Thank you, Hank.
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Nice last line about sniffing the air for snow.
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Thanks Frank.
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Lovely dreamy atmosphere (k)
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Thank you, Kerfe.
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so vivid and visual. i tasted and heard Christmas with your words. ❤
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You’ve made me very happy!
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i am glad that i kind do that. ❤
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You’ve captured the magic of the season. Good one
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Thanks Viv!
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Ah KIm….love the image and love the post. Those sleigh bells jingling…reminds me of a time when our children were probably 10 and 12 (they are now 43 and 45!) and we were in Iowa. We took them out into the country where an Iowa Heritage group offered an “Old Fashioned Iowa Christmas Eve.” We parked our car and went in a horse drawn large sled, blankets covering our lap, horse harnesses jingling, through the snow covered lane, by fields long shorn of corn…to a small farm house that had candles lit in the window. Only 6 people per evening and we were 4. Inside, there were basically two rooms….the “sitting room” and the kitchen room with a rustic table set. There were candles and a fire set…no electricity. There was an old small pump organ in the corner, and our daughter, who started organ lessons at age 7 and by the age of 10 was playing for church services, sat down and played. It was a most incredible evening…I haven’t thought of it in many years. Sadly, there are no photos…just warm memories brought to mind by your poem. Thank you!
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Wow, Lill! You have done some amazing things. I’ve only ever dreamed of riding in a jingling horse-drawn sled. A wonderful ride back in time.
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