The lightest note breaks
space with crystal notes and takes
my breath away, like snowflakes
spinning around my free-
falling soul. Piano keys
reverberate and echo in D,
cascading angst-filled arpeggios
in a swelling tide of melancholia,
a swirling musical oceanus.
A spree of naked notes delights
peaking into rolling notes
of sadly serious moonlight.
And when it’s over, silence glistens
with spectral music – listen!
Kim M. Russell, 5th December 2023
I’m hosting the dVerse Poets Pub Poetics this Tuesday with an instrumental music prompt. I chose to write a poem about ‘Clair de lune’ by Claude Debussy.
I wondered where I have heard that serious moonlight before and all of the sudden you have David Bowie hidden in Claire de lune… I love the way you let your poem move with the piece.
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Thank you, Björn. I couldn’t resist serious moonlight – I have been a Bowie fan since I was a teenager – he came from South London, just like me.
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I went to his concert on his serious moonlight tour when he visited my then hometown in 1983…
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Oh this is absolutely stunning work done, Kim! 😍 I especially admire this part; ” Piano keys
reverberate and echo in D, cascading angst-filled arpeggios in a swelling tide of melancholia.” Yes ❤️❤️
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Thank you, Sanaa! I love this piece.
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It’s such a haunting, ethereal piece. Every time I listen to it, it stays in my head for days.
(It was in All the Light We Never See, among other things.)
You capture the feeling
“cascading angst-filled arpeggios
in a swelling tide of melancholia,
a swirling musical oceanus.”
And the glistening notes at the end.
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Thank you, Merril. I’ve loved this piece for a long time. It was also in Twilight; it was Edward Cullen’s favourite and he played it to Bella when he first got to know her. I remember it in All the Light We Cannot See.
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You’re very welcome, Kim.
I never watched Twilight, but it is a popular piece of music that I know I’ve heard in other shows.
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Wave upon wave of loveliness in your poem and Debussy’s music, and the penultimate stanza, possessing a music of its own: “rolling notes/of sadly serious moonlight.”
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Thank you, Dora. I had two pieces in mind but I couldn’t remember who the other piece was by, so I settled for Debussy – and I’m glad I did.
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It is that impressionistic lightness that is so appealing in Debussy’s music. Just like snowflakes or moonlight. (And how could I resist a serious moonlight allusion?)
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Smiles.
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Gorgeously delicate…stunning poem.
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Thanks so much, DIanne.
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Simply lovely, the music and the poetry. I can you are intimately acquainted with this piece.
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Thanks Lisa. It’s one of my favourites.
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❤
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correction: plz add tell after can
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Very beautifully done.
d’verse would not open the comments for me. This is an interesting prompt. Not sure if I will make it this round.
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Thank you, Dwight. It’s never too late to write to a prompt – you could link up to OLN on Thursday or Friday.
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You are welcome. I decided to follow through after all… :>) Great prompt!
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The piano has a way of capturing light. (K)
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It does, as well as emotions.
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“silence glistens”
Luv this
Much♡love
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Thanks Gillena, and much love to you. 💝
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I like Clair de Lune, it is peaceful. “Piano keys reverberate and echo in D” makes me want to get out my music text book and find it. I had two semesters of college class piano, even learned how to transpose. Right now I couldn’t even play “Bill Grogan’s Goat”. We do have a spinet piano, spoken for, a great grandchild when she is ready for lessons.
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Thank you for the prompt, it brought out memeories. And made me want to purchase a CD of the song that triggered other memories. Jim’s other life.
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Thank you Jim. I’m intrigued about your other life.
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I love piano music but my husband doesn’t. I listen with my headphones on. A spinet piano is interesting.
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“sadly serious moonlight…”
What a perfect phrase for this timeless piece!
Excellent choice!
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Thank you , Susan!
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“Silence glistens” – so beautiful.
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Thank you!
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Beautiful Kim, well written my ftiend. 🙂✌🏼🫶🏼
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Cheers Rob!
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Beautiful, both poem and music, with their far-reaching scenario of emotions, flowing and ebbing, flowing and ebbing. Perfecto!
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Thank you, Carol!
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I have been away from home most of today, just now catching up. I consider it “a great minds” kind of thing that we both chose the same piece of music. From the millions and millions of choices. Your poem captures what the piece is all about and it is gorgeous.
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What a lovely comment, Helen! Thank you so much.
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Nice 👌
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Thank you, Satyam.
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Welcome 🙏 Kim
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I love the composition, and I adore how you translated the rhythm in your line breaks. The image of a “sadly serious Moon” feels very powerful, and I think all poems about any music should end in an invitation, a beckon if you will, to listen.
Thank you likewise for hosting such an inspiring prompt!
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And thank you for reading and commenting!
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It’s such a beautiful piece of music and this is a wonderful tribute.
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Thank you!
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Ah Kim, I share your love of the piece, it is a must have in my view. And (as Bjorn has noted) a Bowie moment too. What’s not to like – an evocative piece.
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Cheers Paul!
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🙂
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I especially love “And when it’s over, silence glistens
with spectral music – listen!”
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“a swirling musical oceanus”
I love the way heard this, Kim.
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Thank you, Sara!
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How beautiful! I definitely get the feeling of that melody from your description. Claire de lune is such a perfect piece.
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Thank you! I’m so glad you recognised the music in the poem.
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