dandelion plants
seeds blown on the roadside
pissing in the wind
fading summer moon
outshone by paper lanterns
tangled in the trees
dandelion moon
blown out by paper lanterns
tangled in the wind
Kim M. Russell, 2018

My response to Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #26 Revise That Haiku
This weekend our challenge is a new ‘Revise That Haiku’ feature, in which the goal is to ‘revise’ the haiku of well-known haiku poets, classical and non-classical. This weekend we have two haiku by classical haiku poets who brought haiku into the 20th century:
nonchalantly pissing
off the side of the road
soaking the young weeds
© Santoka Taneda (1882-1940)
and
the summer moon
there are a lot of paper lanterns
on the street
© Masaoka Shiki (1867-1902)
I have also written a ‘fused’ version.
Again Excellent series of Grooviness.. 😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀
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Cheers Dorna!
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I like the fusion!
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Thank you!
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