I no longer need to hide in
doorways and shadows –
I’m one of the unseen.
I’m a tatty pigeon
faltering on feathers
of memories. I’m a
twisted old silver birch, invisible
in moonlight. I’m a river
with no audible ripple,
grown lumpen and tufty,
dried to a trickle
and a tangle of reeds.
I once felt magnificent;
now I’m insignificant.
Kim M. Russell, 5th February 2019
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Invisible, also linked to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Tuesday Platform
Merril is our host this week, talking about invisibility. She says that there are things that our naked eyes cannot see—light rays, bacteria, faraway planets—and things we do not see because we don’t look up or down or around, such as the homeless or the people who clean houses, offices, and streets. She also mentions the paranormal: ghosts, spirits, poltergeists, and all the things we may sense but not see; and fictional invisibility.
Merril would like to know what we would do if we were invisible and asks us to write a poem in any form that references invisible or invisibility.
I love how you treat aging in your poem… how we transition from the thrill of fear to being “lumpen and tufty”… and the last two lines… wow.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Bjorn!
LikeLike
I can relate to the feelings of being insignificant. Admiring the metaphor of pigeon, birch and river with no audible ripple. Being one of the unseen can be devastating.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Grace. I hope I don’t fade into invisibility in my old age.
LikeLike
Oh, there’s sadness here. Is this the librarian’s wife?
LikeLiked by 1 person
It’s a library volunteer!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Of course!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh, so full of lovely phrases–the imagery of aging– but so sad–to be one of the invisible. And that is what happens to so many as they grow older. The Klimt works perfectly here!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Merril!
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re welcome!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Tufty! What a great word. Takes me back to Tufty the road safety squirrel when I was little.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I remember him!
LikeLike
Poignant, existential, sweet & sad–you kept me riveted to every word. UNSEEN is a grand title, worthy of a novel or film.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Glenn.
LikeLike
The part about the river reminds me of a branch of a nearby river. When I was a child, it was big enough to launch our small motor boat into, but now it is filled with cattails and muck. Nobody is throwing fishing lines into it and leaving hooks on the shore anymore, so in that sense it’s a good thing. I really like your poem.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Jade.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You are welcome.
LikeLiked by 1 person
The imagery of aging is so tender and lovely here, Kim! ❤️ I also adore that title! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Sanaa! 🙂
LikeLike
I am one of the unseen. I love this and everything about this poem!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Kim, you will never be insignificant!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Toni,. you are a darling and you’ve made my morning!
LikeLike
I speak truth! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
😊
LikeLike
I’m a “tatty pigeon” too, Kim, if it makes you feel any better. Boy, can I relate. Love that term though.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, V.J.! The pigeons in our garden aren’t so tatty – they’re well fed and vocal. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Lol!
LikeLiked by 1 person
A great poem of wonderful imagery… I love the line…. I’m a river
with no audible ripple,
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Dwight.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Wonderful imagery and descriptions in this piece. I admire it so much.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you kindly, Sherry!
LikeLike
We are what we believe ourselves to be, but of course, social attitudes play a big part. If society honoured age as an achievement, we would feel differently about aging. No doubt however, this world is our choice and our karma.
LikeLiked by 1 person
So true.
LikeLike
We do become more and more invisible as we grow older. But in a way it can be freeing. (K)
LikeLiked by 1 person
That’s true – we can be ourselves without anyone judging.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I was moved by this prompt to write in the same direction Kim, aging. I loved the way you reached into nature to pull your visuals. They were wonderful. I especially liked the rippleless river. We dtill are magnificent Kim, never reliquish your crown. The patina is well earned! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks Rob! Poetry is one place I don’t feel so invisible and, of course, when I’m doing my volunteer work.
LikeLike
Aging tends to make some like this, Kim. Being with younger people tends to keep one visible for a longer time.
..
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re right, Jim! That’s one of the reasons I do volunteer work with children in schools and libraries. 🙂
LikeLike
But the poem is magnificent! 😀
LikeLiked by 1 person
🙂
LikeLike
such despair at being insignificant. as our bodies age we forget the mind is still sharp, in that lies the greatest despair for things we are yet to do. graphic and melancholy Kim, but it connected with the word invisible perfectly
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Gina.
LikeLiked by 1 person
And ain’t it grand! One just has to learn to see with invisible eyes. A whole world sings there. Great response to the Deeverse challenge.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks Brendan.
LikeLike
“I’m a tatty pigeon/faltering on feathers/of memories.”
Oh, how heart-rending these lines are! The insignificance is profound in this subject and its bodied existence. Very well penned, Kim! ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Anmol. 😊
LikeLike
Maybe it’s hormones, but this made me cry. Beautiful, haunting and so damn real….
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Jane.
LikeLike
I agree this also made me cry. It is so beautifully, painfully written.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Susie.
LikeLike
This is brilliant. The transition from something profound to a mere shadow is caught so well in your lines, Kim!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Vinitha!
LikeLike
Those last two lines were brilliant!
LikeLike
Gorgeous and heartbreaking imagery, Kim. Each pulls me in as the next beckons in f’s and t’s. *swoon*
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much, Nora.
LikeLike
Fabulous imagery, Kim! I especially love “I’m a twisted old silver birch, invisible in moonlight.”
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Lynn!
LikeLike
This makes me want to go out and consciously work at seeing the invisible and noticing the unseen. Since nothing or no one is truly insignificant, think of all that we miss by overlooking.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I wonder how many people who feel themselves to be insignificant hide away in their homes, where no one can see them.
LikeLiked by 1 person
That is becoming such an increasing problem, for seniors especially. Goes hand-in-hand with the disappearance of the extended family.
LikeLiked by 1 person
A beautiful poem about aging, Kim. I think we sometimes feel invisible as we move through our different life stages. Youth is so vibrant, so colorful and it dances with us, uplifts us through much of our life.In our 20’s when we are still beautiful and young, there’s the angst of ‘I can’t believe I’ll be 30 soon.’ And as we age the parchment paper skin, the fading grey hair, the aches and pains the very shrinking of our stature – this is the slow waltz of aging and we feel our own mortality more with every passing day. I LOVE the ‘tatty pigeon’ line. Brilliant.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much for the thoughtful comment, Linda. It”s much appreciated.
LikeLiked by 1 person
My pleasure.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I love your tatty pigeon…..it reminds me of my mum, one time when dad was away she sat there lamenting that this was her life in two carrier bags, she had been tidying those cupboards, the ones with the tattered memories, an old valentines card, a dog-eared calendar, a photo faded by the sunshine and she was so aware that when she was gone all these things that had held meaning to her would be meaningless to everyone else. She was your tatty old pigeon. Now I am fast becoming the tatty old pigeon.
LikeLiked by 1 person
🙂
LikeLike
Lovely imagery used..enjoyed reading !🤗🤗
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you for reading and commenting!
LikeLiked by 1 person