Our bodies unfurl
and then curl
into each other
under night’s cover.
We are waves in motion
on an inky ocean
or sand-blown stones
hidden in a desert’s undertones.
We are intertwined
limbs, hearts, souls and minds,
dancing in the dark
until we spark –
stars falling
in the empty sky of morning.
Kim M. Russell, 13th August 2019

My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Lost in the Translation, also linked to Imaginary Garden with Real Toads Tuesday Platform
Laura is our host today, and she has introduced three foreign language poets of diverse time and place: the Serbian poet Desanka Maksimović (1896-1993); Chilean poet Gabriela Mistral (1889-1957); and Octavio Paz (1914-1998), a Mexican Nobel prize winner.
The challenge is to select one of the poems and write our own interpretation. Laura suggests using the title or some of the words or just trying to keep the flavour of poem and poet. She asks us to refer to the chosen poem – I chose ‘Two Bodies’ by Octavio Paz, mainly because of the imagery.
We did choose the same poem, but I think we ended up in two different worlds when it came to bodies… yours is so filled with the wonder of a night of two lovers… very nice.
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Thank you, Bjorn!
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This is really beautiful, and the image you picked to go with it works so perfectly.
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Thank you so much, Carol!
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“We are waves in motion / on an inky ocean / or sand-blown stones / hidden in a desert’s undertones.” I love the imagery here. Great work!
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Thank you so much, Clara!
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I love the lovers swirling in the night until the stars go to sleep.
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Thank you, Jade!
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You are very welcome, Kim 🙂
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😊
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A beautiful portrayal of a romantic interlude!
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Thank you, Bev!
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thanks for joining in Kim – so much movement in your two bodies – you have given them a very fluid and feminine (in the yang sense) shape and so nicely rhymed
“and-blown stones
hidden in a desert’s undertones.”
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Thank you for a challenging prompt, Laura, that gave me much to think about and three new poets to enjoy.
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You present two poetic souls, and I’m glad you kept them intertwined. I was tempted 9and succumbed) to go in the opposite direction.
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This one seems to be quite popular- a lovely poem Kim!
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Thanks Linda!
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Beautiful, just lovely!
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Thank you!
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You had me at /the empty sky of morning/. I liked your internal rhymes too. I’ve never thought of a morning sky that way; very existential–a new day, as empty as an atom, yet in the negative space rife with the promise of everything.
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I had a rough night, so I was up super early this morning and got to watch the light creep into the empty sky.
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Beautiful!
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome 😇
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Love this Kim. You captured well the essence of Paz! I used same poem (very loosely), but I wandered down passion’s path.
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Thanks Rob! After a rough night, I’ll be back to read and comment in a while.
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A very interesting take on this poem! I liked this line:
or sand-blown stones
hidden in a desert’s undertones.
Great image!
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Thank you, Dwight!
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Beautiful images. They work so well together, I can’t pick just one out. (K)
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Thank you, Kerfe.
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I like this, Kim, even though you left with a sparky ending. It is the way I envision two bodies close close might act. Typical for marriages and relationships.
BTW, there is a great Perseid meteor shower visible last night and tonight. Best viewed after the moon is over our horizon. 3-4 AM until nearing sunrise.
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Cheers Jim!
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I love that we are all just stars falling into the empty morning sky!
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Thank you, Rajani!
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Lovely noctal translation of Paz. Dream and love in bed together is the right medium for pouring his ecstasies.
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Thank you, Brendan.
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This is so beautiful!!
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Thank you!
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This is very beautiful, Kim.
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Thank you, Sherry.
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Lovely word dancing in this one. I love how the dancers seem so responsive to each other and harmonize so well.
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Thank you, Rommy.
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This flowed extremely well with each image cascading into the next. I enjoyed reading this.
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Thank you, Barry!
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What moving poetry,I adoreeee😍😍
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Thank you!😊
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