Why did you ponder on that day
that started with a shower of rain?
You could have started with a ray
of sunshine and then waylaid
us with a downpour.
Just saying.
Why did you have to go on about
the many hues of green and shout
the praise of buds that sprout
and burst with leaves, without
considering the soil?
I’d like to know.
And what’s the butterfly doing
in a poem about the joy of spring?
Aren’t butterflies a summer thing?
And when did they start bursting
out of leafy clouds?
Poetic licence, huh!
Who suggested the flowers?
It’s known that poets spend hours
writing about daffodils and bowers.
However, I like the idea of colours
in a spillage
from an artist’s palette.
What on earth made you end with a couplet?
Oh, I see, the whole thing is a yellow sonnet!
Kim M Russell, 12th April 2023
With a dozen poems under our belts, we are now at Day 12 of NaPoWriMo. The (optional) prompt is a challenge to write a poem that addresses itself or some aspect of its self (i.e., “Dear Poem,” or “what are my quatrains up to?”; “Couplet, come with me . . .”) I took the poem I wrote for yesterday’s Poetics over at the dVerse Poets Pub, Spring Spillage, and turned the interrogation spotlight on it.
Also shared at the dVerse Poets Pub Open Link Night on 20th March 2025.
Who suggested the flowers?
It’s known that poets spend hours
writing about daffodils and bowers… love that!!
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Thank you Rajani!
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I love the whole poem, and I love personally returning time and time again to all of the imagery you described, while writing and also I think we all need this :”Poetic licence, huh!” – on a T-shirt!
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Thank so much. I might do the t-shirt thing. 🙂
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I say big yes, it would be fun to have one, and I am seriously thinking about it! I feel like it will additionally help me feel more free when out photographing flowers – because people keep starring at me like I’m doing gods know what. This way, at least I would do my diligent part of letting them know I am just a poet let loose in the wild!
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What a lovely poem! I really enjoyed the questions.
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Thank you!
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They do what they like (as does the weather). At least we can dream in yellow.
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I love the play up of words and the rhyming..they are so on point.❤️
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Thank you Mich!
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I so much prefers the poem of soil to that of flowers… love it in the way it address itself (and the poet)…
But after all roses are red
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Thank you, Björn. Me too.
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LOVE the t-shirt idea! But how about “Personification of poetic license”?
I too am smitten by the line about daffodils and bowers. And the ending made me smile!
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Thank you, Lill! If the weather continues to be warm and sunny, I might think about a series of t-shirts.
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Made me laugh, Kim!
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🤓
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Gorgeous! 😍 I especially love this part; “Aren’t butterflies a summer thing? And when did they start bursting out of leafy clouds?” 🩷🩷
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Thank you, Sanaa.
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Glad somebody is on to this vernal caper! I can rest better knowing Spring better watch its steps carefully with you keeping an eye on it.
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😉
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nice conversation with your poetic self
much♡love
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Thank you, Gillena, and much love to you.
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This is brilliant Kim, and so skilfully written. JIM
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Cheers for the lovely comment, Jim!
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Ha about the reference of butterflies being a summer thing…in poetry they can be multi-seasonal. The beauty of creative writing…
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I’ve already seen butterflies i our garden. I think the yellow ones, brimstone butterflies, arrive early.
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Very engaging, and touchedof the theatre of the absurd, which I like, but really lovely in details…oh woe is the poet, having to follow unwritten rules, dally with things that are bent in order to portray a landscape under poetic licence. Nice humour..some things worth thinking about, too!
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Cheers Ain!
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This is so funny! Also it sounds like my eldest son’s bitter comments when studying poems for GCSE English.
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🤓
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Very creative Sonnet, Kim! I love what you did in your conversation with the creator!
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Thank you, Dwight!
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Delightful, clever, and amusing, Kim! Why indeed? The poet’s mind. 😊
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I love that you’ve taken poetic license with your poem, carrying on from NaPoWriMo too. So fun
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Thank you very much!
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I love the call and response in this whole poem, Kim!
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Thank you, Nina!
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