Spinning

that
feeling of
childhood revolution
with both arms outstretched
and the whole world condensed
into horizontal lines of a spinning top
when you dare yourself to look up
at a sky that’s about to pop
think you’ll never stop
and then you
drop

onto a grassy spot
you roll over among daisies
and the world tips
on
­            its
­                           axis

the same feeling
as our first kiss
a brush of lips
like a moth
at the window
a kiss that made us both

glow
in the autumn
chill my hand wrapped in
yours as we crunched up the beach
road our heads tipped back to look at
sequinned constellations tacked
across the sky – spinning us
into outer space
again

Kim M. Russell, 21st July 2020

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My response to dVerse Poets Pub Poetics: Revolution

Merril is back to tend the bar for this Tuesday’s Poetics. She writes about Independence Day, Bastille Day, and the history and use of the word ‘revolution’.  She has shared extracts from a poem by Polish poet, Wisława Szymborska, ‘I’m Explaining a few Things’ by Neruda writes, and Dante’s Divine Comedy.

Merril asks us to write poems that explore revolution in some way, not particularly political, possibly about historical or modern revolutionary movement, the revolution of celestial bodies, or revolving motion in some way. We can also use a painting as inspiration or perhaps start our own poetic revolutions or invent a revolutionary new poetic form!

43 thoughts on “Spinning”

  1. Oh Kim! You have outdone yourself with this one. I smiled as soon as I saw the shape and then kept smiling all the way through. I am giddy with the spinning! Just a WONDERFUL response to the prompt!

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    1. Ooh, thank you muchly, Lill! I wasn’t so sure about it but it wouldn’t let me do anything more with it, one of those stubborn poems that fights back! I’m so glad it works.

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  4. This is beautiful Kim! You’ve captured the wonder and joy of the child, and the love of the adult–both spinning.
    When my younger daughter was a toddler, she would spin around and say, “I’m bizzy!” That always made me laugh.

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  7. I love this all from the beginning to end. It’s immersive and beautiful, and wild in imagery. I love the rhythm and rhyme scheme as well. Amazing, amazing work!

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  8. This is splendid and fun and so very personal. Youth, ah yes–so easy to be rebellious when tanned skin and raging hormones make the future look so deceptively bright

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  13. kaykuala

    That’s a lot of revolutions all going on at the same time. Love the visual structure, Kim. It gives a picture of movements and mobility reminiscent of a revolution.

    Hank

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